schedule
February 14, 2013 at 12:00 AM
So they had the funeral. But of course Court and Julian kept their distance since they don't know much of the people there. And it seems that Julian doesn't want to pressure Allore into the family secret, he wants her to live her childhood out before she has to become fully apart of the family for good. And with Court it seems like he is bi-polar, one minute he is calm and flirty and then the next he angry as hell. Now it seems another cousin has introduced himself and Court does not like him at all. I look forward to the next update!
schedule
February 14, 2013 at 12:00 AM
This story really caught my attention,looking forward to the update.
schedule
February 14, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Oh, how I hope you continue!
schedule
February 14, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 4
I have been known to do 2 reviews for one chapter because sometimes I’m a broomhead but this time it’s with intent. I’m so sorry you feel discourage or saddened by the lack of reviews, and I myself have read your reviews and they may be on the light side but you seem to have quite a few loyal followers. I read one reviewer that assumed one possible reason for the lack of reviews is the subject matter which is very plausible but still silly in my mind I highly doubt someone’s mother, brother or any other is trolling the same sight looking to grass on other people? The security code is a mild annoyance but I deal. I think most people just don’t realize how important feedback is to the creative process good, bad or indifferent; I used to be few and far between with my reviews until I stumbled onto one of your other stories (on the other website that shall remain nameless). And you made me feel so valued as a reader that I couldn’t not (yes I know a double negative) leave a review. And as for lack of content in your story, I guess I must be a better storyteller than reviewer because somehow I find a way to write lengthy reviews on every chapter?
I mean no harm or disrespect to anyone who reviews or doesn’t, I just felt moved to leave this “review” more like commentary. Oh and the last time I checked (8:00am 2/14) you had over 1,00 hits take that as a compliment. "Mourn the loses because they're many, but celebrate the victories because they're few".
You know You Love Me, XoXo
I have been known to do 2 reviews for one chapter because sometimes I’m a broomhead but this time it’s with intent. I’m so sorry you feel discourage or saddened by the lack of reviews, and I myself have read your reviews and they may be on the light side but you seem to have quite a few loyal followers. I read one reviewer that assumed one possible reason for the lack of reviews is the subject matter which is very plausible but still silly in my mind I highly doubt someone’s mother, brother or any other is trolling the same sight looking to grass on other people? The security code is a mild annoyance but I deal. I think most people just don’t realize how important feedback is to the creative process good, bad or indifferent; I used to be few and far between with my reviews until I stumbled onto one of your other stories (on the other website that shall remain nameless). And you made me feel so valued as a reader that I couldn’t not (yes I know a double negative) leave a review. And as for lack of content in your story, I guess I must be a better storyteller than reviewer because somehow I find a way to write lengthy reviews on every chapter?
I mean no harm or disrespect to anyone who reviews or doesn’t, I just felt moved to leave this “review” more like commentary. Oh and the last time I checked (8:00am 2/14) you had over 1,00 hits take that as a compliment. "Mourn the loses because they're many, but celebrate the victories because they're few".
You know You Love Me, XoXo
schedule
February 14, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 4 (The real review)
I can’t believe in my review of ch 3 I forgot to say how exciting it is that you are putting yourself in new territory SCHOOL! I’m pretty sure this is the first story of yours I’ve read that is set (partially) in HS. I remember HS clearly and it wasn’t the best years of my life and anyone who refers to HS as the best years of their lives must have some serious third degree burns in their future. But I digress, I think this chapter perfectly describes HS life; I immediately got an image in my head of this school and the nasty little over privileged brats that go there. Court is so complicated he is part caring brother but also part overbearing boyfriend and equal parts creepy but then there is something that makes you want more of him? We’ve only just met William but I hope he is as kind and gentle as he seems Eowyn could use some genuine kindness without the worry of sexual advances. I have never personally experienced a pack of catty girls bitch about me (I was a mere blip on the radar) but reading that part made feel as if I had I felt small and scared reading it. Despite the kiss at the end of the chapter I feel that Julian is more fatherly to Eowyn, perhaps he realizes he does not have to continue in his family creed with her, isn’t enough he has a son who is also his nephew?
You know You Love Me, XoXo
I can’t believe in my review of ch 3 I forgot to say how exciting it is that you are putting yourself in new territory SCHOOL! I’m pretty sure this is the first story of yours I’ve read that is set (partially) in HS. I remember HS clearly and it wasn’t the best years of my life and anyone who refers to HS as the best years of their lives must have some serious third degree burns in their future. But I digress, I think this chapter perfectly describes HS life; I immediately got an image in my head of this school and the nasty little over privileged brats that go there. Court is so complicated he is part caring brother but also part overbearing boyfriend and equal parts creepy but then there is something that makes you want more of him? We’ve only just met William but I hope he is as kind and gentle as he seems Eowyn could use some genuine kindness without the worry of sexual advances. I have never personally experienced a pack of catty girls bitch about me (I was a mere blip on the radar) but reading that part made feel as if I had I felt small and scared reading it. Despite the kiss at the end of the chapter I feel that Julian is more fatherly to Eowyn, perhaps he realizes he does not have to continue in his family creed with her, isn’t enough he has a son who is also his nephew?
You know You Love Me, XoXo
schedule
February 14, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Ah come on, let us drown you a little!! You're a great writer and deserve the great reviews! Another good chapter. I am loving this sick ass family!
schedule
February 14, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 5
I was right! He is moving past his family creed and I like how he talked to her about it putting her at ease. And how compassionate was he to her thru the entire ordeal of her granddad’s funeral. He really is becoming a true father. Maybe it took him getting older to become one. It was considerate of him to let her choose her tutor even though he clearly didn’t approve of her choice. It was more than decent of Julian to take such care of the granddad and it meant so much to his “little girl”.
Now what to think of Court I am so torn, he is seductive but he shouldn’t be, he plays the part of a slim ball well but he also cares for Eowyn, and more than just a female relative to screw.
Owww and unfolds another mystery: “We don’t discuss Miriam, “I’ve been wondering what happened to the mother and although this doesn’t tell me much you can damn well assume it’s not a happy-fucking-ending for Miriam.
A triple cousin, I can’t even begin to imagine what the bloody hell that means. This family tree must look like a God Damn Palm Tree (no branches). This Gabriel is going to cause as heap of trouble and for some reason I enjoy Court being so territorial of Eowyn in this instant. “Dump that cunt”, no she’s fun, LOL.
Again I want to congratulate you on the language listing to Eowyn’s old neighbors and her own speak really sets her apart from her new family but she still does not come off as dumb more less formally educated.
You made me laugh out loud when Eowyn repeated the work ‘fuck’.
You know You Love Me, XoXo
I was right! He is moving past his family creed and I like how he talked to her about it putting her at ease. And how compassionate was he to her thru the entire ordeal of her granddad’s funeral. He really is becoming a true father. Maybe it took him getting older to become one. It was considerate of him to let her choose her tutor even though he clearly didn’t approve of her choice. It was more than decent of Julian to take such care of the granddad and it meant so much to his “little girl”.
Now what to think of Court I am so torn, he is seductive but he shouldn’t be, he plays the part of a slim ball well but he also cares for Eowyn, and more than just a female relative to screw.
Owww and unfolds another mystery: “We don’t discuss Miriam, “I’ve been wondering what happened to the mother and although this doesn’t tell me much you can damn well assume it’s not a happy-fucking-ending for Miriam.
A triple cousin, I can’t even begin to imagine what the bloody hell that means. This family tree must look like a God Damn Palm Tree (no branches). This Gabriel is going to cause as heap of trouble and for some reason I enjoy Court being so territorial of Eowyn in this instant. “Dump that cunt”, no she’s fun, LOL.
Again I want to congratulate you on the language listing to Eowyn’s old neighbors and her own speak really sets her apart from her new family but she still does not come off as dumb more less formally educated.
You made me laugh out loud when Eowyn repeated the work ‘fuck’.
You know You Love Me, XoXo
schedule
February 13, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I like it. Not a bomb to me. cant wait to find out who gave her tthe flower
schedule
February 13, 2013 at 12:00 AM
This is a very interesting story. It's creepy in all the right places and just sucks you in. I can't wait to see where you take it. Awesomely done!
schedule
February 13, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Im actually starting to like this story. Its different but I like it. I saw you were discouraged because of reviews so I thought I would right one because I do read this story and I really like it. Keep up the good work!!!! Cant wait for the next chapter!!!!!!