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March 24, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Just wanted to drop a review and show my support. I've read all of your work posted here, and although I can't say it was always enjoyable, it has always moved me. I believe your storytelling ability has much improved over the course of the body of work here, and this story shows it. I believe that if you keep up the polishing of your craft, you would definitely have an audience for your work if you choose to publish. Especially starting somewhere like Smashwords. I'd pay for a novella from you! Thanks for sharing your stories, and I'll be watching for the updates!
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March 24, 2013 at 12:00 AM
your story has ruled my life today. its all i can think about. So write more ok? love your work
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March 24, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Wow they both had a come to Jesus talk. They love each other. Awesome chapter.
Linda
Linda
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March 23, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I love it she is never going to just give up. I am happy her father came to her. I do wonder once she kills will she get a small amount of control in her life. Maybe I me she will have power??
Linda
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March 23, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Wow!! and Yes!! I don't no,what can I say? You just keep knocking these chapter's out of the park. And chapter after chapter they get more and more addicted. Can't blame Eden for wanting and desiring Gabe the way she want's and desires Court.But Gabe doesn't force her like Court does.The more Julian and Court don't her to be around him the she going to be pulled to him.I knew Julian had known about Court raping Eden.He's such an creep.Really love that Eden slapped him. He and Court deserved that and more. Who is this older woman in the rotted house? Why is the pendent that Rachelle gave her burning her the more she's listens to the story the old ladies telling her? What does Josephine have to with her mother and her birth? Was her grandfather really her real grandfather?Please don't let that Butler blood over take her. Annabelle better watch out.Not just Annabelle but I think Julian,Court and the rest the "family" better watch out too. It's like something snapped or awoken in Eden and and shes out for bleed.To me she's stay an Allore and she always going remember the good that grandfather taught her, know matter what the Butler do or say to her.That Eden is still so defiant of Court,Julian and the rest of family let's me know she's always going to be an Allore. What another great chapter. Can wait for the next chapter.
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March 22, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I'm sorry I haven't reviewed as much I should have, I'm a terrible lurker.
But holyshit, I love you.
At first I didn't know how I felt about this powers thing; but it definitely makes it more... interesting.
I wouldn't be surprised if Julian and Court had a ton of bastard children around the state.
But holyshit, I love you.
At first I didn't know how I felt about this powers thing; but it definitely makes it more... interesting.
I wouldn't be surprised if Julian and Court had a ton of bastard children around the state.
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March 22, 2013 at 12:00 AM
CH 19
I always like your chapters you know that but this one had my heart clenched from the third line, Court being so truthful and raw was scary. His thought process is maddening he is angered by her confession of love because she hasn’t offered herself to him. Court is so used to being offered everything never realizing that sometimes he needs to ask for things or practice some patients. I am confused by Court shaving Eowyn was it to make her more to his liking or to embarrass her or both? Court does all these horrid things to Eowyn yet I still love him! Why? Is it because I see him as a lost little boy who’s lost a mother and raised to be a princes that he has no concept of right or wrong just what feels good and what doesn’t. Then lashing out like a child when Eowyn doesn’t do as he wants. I shouldn’t leave a review with acknowledging Eowyn she has been victimized again, she is in such a difficult place she wants closeness to him and wants to be with him but not like that.
Owww the diner scene juicy! So this waitress is pregnant presumably by Court is she that dumb to get pregnant by him and then tell him, of course she could just be lying to “trap” him either way she’s stupid. And speaking of pregnancy I know Court pulled out this time but I don’t recall if he did the other two times he had Eowyn, not to mention the pull out method is not the most reliable forms of birth control. She’s 14 so I presume she’s had her period, so somebody may need a trip to GYN to make sure no little swimmers have found a home? Did Court flinch did he let his façade fall when he told Eowyn that he would leave the fate of his possible unborn child up to the Eye? I had to read it twice to see it.
I want Gabriel and Eowyn to be friends, I think he can help her navigate thru this fucked up family. He knows what a nut job his sister is and can possibly keep a leash on the bitch (pun intended). But I fear for her friendship with William is going to be lost, he’s either going to distance himself from her because she’s becoming a Butler or she’s walk away from him for his own safety.
Oh and I hope Anborn has some good details regarding the strife between Gabe and Court!
I always like your chapters you know that but this one had my heart clenched from the third line, Court being so truthful and raw was scary. His thought process is maddening he is angered by her confession of love because she hasn’t offered herself to him. Court is so used to being offered everything never realizing that sometimes he needs to ask for things or practice some patients. I am confused by Court shaving Eowyn was it to make her more to his liking or to embarrass her or both? Court does all these horrid things to Eowyn yet I still love him! Why? Is it because I see him as a lost little boy who’s lost a mother and raised to be a princes that he has no concept of right or wrong just what feels good and what doesn’t. Then lashing out like a child when Eowyn doesn’t do as he wants. I shouldn’t leave a review with acknowledging Eowyn she has been victimized again, she is in such a difficult place she wants closeness to him and wants to be with him but not like that.
Owww the diner scene juicy! So this waitress is pregnant presumably by Court is she that dumb to get pregnant by him and then tell him, of course she could just be lying to “trap” him either way she’s stupid. And speaking of pregnancy I know Court pulled out this time but I don’t recall if he did the other two times he had Eowyn, not to mention the pull out method is not the most reliable forms of birth control. She’s 14 so I presume she’s had her period, so somebody may need a trip to GYN to make sure no little swimmers have found a home? Did Court flinch did he let his façade fall when he told Eowyn that he would leave the fate of his possible unborn child up to the Eye? I had to read it twice to see it.
I want Gabriel and Eowyn to be friends, I think he can help her navigate thru this fucked up family. He knows what a nut job his sister is and can possibly keep a leash on the bitch (pun intended). But I fear for her friendship with William is going to be lost, he’s either going to distance himself from her because she’s becoming a Butler or she’s walk away from him for his own safety.
Oh and I hope Anborn has some good details regarding the strife between Gabe and Court!
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March 22, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Thank You!!!so much. I just love the way Eden doesn't just give into Court and thinking all the horrible things he does is right know matter how much she loves him. Love that Gabe is back. What did happen between Gabe and Court? Eden likes,wants and is starting think about Gabe just as Court as much she does Court. And Court can't stand it.It's horrible how Court treated the girl that is pregnant with his baby and raping Eden again and how he and the rest of the awful"family" treat people. Another great chapter mind is still reeling from everything I just read. Please don't let anything happen to Gabe!! Thanks once again. I can't wait for the next chapter. You truly made my day.
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March 22, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Camp I don't know how you do it. But every chapter in all your stories tops the last one. I can't wait for more.
Linda
Linda
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March 22, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Please!!I need more,I don't think Gabe is the dangerous one, Julian is scared Gabe's going to tell Eden the price the "family" really has to pay in for all the inbreeding,beauty,money and power they have.Can't wait to read what Gabe has to say about Julian calling him dangerous. And what Julian's going to tell Eden about what's so dangerous about Gabe. How come Julian is never around when Court rapes Eden and if he knows (I'm sure he does)how come he never punishes him and make him stop raping her.Can't get enough of this story.Love looking forward to next update.