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March 27, 2013 at 12:00 AM
You use commas when they should be periods, but nice plot
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March 26, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I really love ur fic *.*
Hoping some more developpement with julian 8D
Ehehee! And i love it when court gets jealous! XD
Serves him right x)
Keep up the good work
Hoping some more developpement with julian 8D
Ehehee! And i love it when court gets jealous! XD
Serves him right x)
Keep up the good work
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March 26, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Don't know what to say. It was another was another great chapter.Still amazing to keep founding things out about Julian,Court and the "family blood" and what they have to do to keep the blood pure and how they get their "special abilities". I know William said a lot things,but everything he's said, Eden said to herself and out loud, I know the difference is it's her "family",she's was so horrible to him. She's starting to think,act and say nasty little thing's like Court and the rest of them. I really hate how she's changing from how she was when first got there.Now she doesn't have any friends outside of the family,because it look like her and Annabelle might become friend. She just pushed William away.Waiting happily for next chapter.
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March 26, 2013 at 12:00 AM
CH 12
I’m still reliving Court and Eowyn making love, how is she not swooning over what just happened! Court is right Eowyn is cold. It was curious, the revelation of The Six (families) that are inbreed power hungry dare I say freaks? Love, love, loved Court calling the family mutants but I wonder does he really feel that way or is he trying to get a rise out of Julian (who I’m pretty sure he sees as his rival). Damn you Julian you’ve got me so conflicted, I loved the budding father/daughter relationship but then again he does have this magnetism that draws you in. And as for the underwear sniffing I don’t feel it was tender but I didn’t think it was completely creepy either. Julian confessing that he was glad she consented to the sex with Court was his fatherly side coming out (IMO). “I felt something like a shadow cross my mind at his touch.” feel like that means something but I’m not exactly sure what it means yet. Julian not being mad over Eowyn reading Miriam’s diary makes me wonder, was he not mad because he wasn’t possessive over her, never in love with her but with Court she was his mother and felt possessive of her? Am I just reading too much into everything??
Court was physically and emotionally naked as he spoke with “Lily Anne”, at first it seemed so strange him walking around naked but it really made him even more vulnerable. Court is right (again) Eowyn told Annabelle to put up road blocks up but I fully believe she doesn’t realize it. And in the end Peter Pan climbed a tree to get away from the wicked girl.
I’m glad that writing is the best part of your day but remember when you aren’t writing them are many of reading and enjoy what you have created, that should bring some sunshine into those moments when you are not writing. And from one rambler to another, I love your rambles it gives us a glimpse into the real camp who is smart, dark and humourous.
XoXo
I’m still reliving Court and Eowyn making love, how is she not swooning over what just happened! Court is right Eowyn is cold. It was curious, the revelation of The Six (families) that are inbreed power hungry dare I say freaks? Love, love, loved Court calling the family mutants but I wonder does he really feel that way or is he trying to get a rise out of Julian (who I’m pretty sure he sees as his rival). Damn you Julian you’ve got me so conflicted, I loved the budding father/daughter relationship but then again he does have this magnetism that draws you in. And as for the underwear sniffing I don’t feel it was tender but I didn’t think it was completely creepy either. Julian confessing that he was glad she consented to the sex with Court was his fatherly side coming out (IMO). “I felt something like a shadow cross my mind at his touch.” feel like that means something but I’m not exactly sure what it means yet. Julian not being mad over Eowyn reading Miriam’s diary makes me wonder, was he not mad because he wasn’t possessive over her, never in love with her but with Court she was his mother and felt possessive of her? Am I just reading too much into everything??
Court was physically and emotionally naked as he spoke with “Lily Anne”, at first it seemed so strange him walking around naked but it really made him even more vulnerable. Court is right (again) Eowyn told Annabelle to put up road blocks up but I fully believe she doesn’t realize it. And in the end Peter Pan climbed a tree to get away from the wicked girl.
I’m glad that writing is the best part of your day but remember when you aren’t writing them are many of reading and enjoy what you have created, that should bring some sunshine into those moments when you are not writing. And from one rambler to another, I love your rambles it gives us a glimpse into the real camp who is smart, dark and humourous.
XoXo
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March 26, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I did not even realize you were the author of the other story I love oh so much, But A Shadow. What the fuck? Well I'm addicted. You have great dialogue, interesting plot, and ugh, sexy, brooding characters. For AFF even 2-3 reviews a chapter is good...this site is a little slower. :( much love.
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March 26, 2013 at 12:00 AM
If Eowyn wasn't a Butler before, she is now.
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March 24, 2013 at 12:00 AM
CH 21
Damn I wish I could sneak a peek at the Butler Family Tree! If you ever want me to leave another review you HAVE to make me a promise: when this becomes published you have a Butler Family Tree companion book, and possibly stuck in there a few tore out pages from Josephine’s diary.
I love Julian coming in like a Black Knight (not a White they’re wussy’s), him warning Gabe, it wasn’t even a threat but a matter of fact, he speaks with such authority it really reminds me of where Court gets his stature from. Damn am I the only one who fund it dead sexy Julian laying claim to Eowyn for Court and himself?? Then her reaction; she was pissed at “belongs to Court” but then calmed when her added “to myself”, oh God, I think I moistened a bit at that (TMI?).
“My children are perfect as is almost all of the blood, physically that is.” That was a delicate way of calling Annabelle crazier than a shit house rat. I was intrigued to hear how Julian thinks of his son, he’s not blinded by all of Courts faults but he also doesn’t see them all as faults. I believe Julian is speaking his truth when he says he doesn’t believe Eowyn was raped by Court but I do believe it was rape (as does Eowyn) but I also believe she wants to be with Court but on her terms. A lot of Eowyn’s problem (I think) is she wants to control her life and know her life is being controlled right down to the underwear she wears.
The old woman reminds me of an old seer in the story books giving Eowyn just enough answers to make her question everything. I think I know where this (part) is going and I can’t wait! And I have to acknowledge my favorite line in the entire ch (this may annoy you that I picked this as my favorite): “This woman was short a sandwich from her picnic”
I know you worry about that you’re all talk not much action but I love your talks and if there wasn’t so much talking we wouldn’t be so invested and it makes the actions better and more poignant.
Well I know the next iis posted so I’m on to Ch 22: Eowyn’s Revenge!
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Damn I wish I could sneak a peek at the Butler Family Tree! If you ever want me to leave another review you HAVE to make me a promise: when this becomes published you have a Butler Family Tree companion book, and possibly stuck in there a few tore out pages from Josephine’s diary.
I love Julian coming in like a Black Knight (not a White they’re wussy’s), him warning Gabe, it wasn’t even a threat but a matter of fact, he speaks with such authority it really reminds me of where Court gets his stature from. Damn am I the only one who fund it dead sexy Julian laying claim to Eowyn for Court and himself?? Then her reaction; she was pissed at “belongs to Court” but then calmed when her added “to myself”, oh God, I think I moistened a bit at that (TMI?).
“My children are perfect as is almost all of the blood, physically that is.” That was a delicate way of calling Annabelle crazier than a shit house rat. I was intrigued to hear how Julian thinks of his son, he’s not blinded by all of Courts faults but he also doesn’t see them all as faults. I believe Julian is speaking his truth when he says he doesn’t believe Eowyn was raped by Court but I do believe it was rape (as does Eowyn) but I also believe she wants to be with Court but on her terms. A lot of Eowyn’s problem (I think) is she wants to control her life and know her life is being controlled right down to the underwear she wears.
The old woman reminds me of an old seer in the story books giving Eowyn just enough answers to make her question everything. I think I know where this (part) is going and I can’t wait! And I have to acknowledge my favorite line in the entire ch (this may annoy you that I picked this as my favorite): “This woman was short a sandwich from her picnic”
I know you worry about that you’re all talk not much action but I love your talks and if there wasn’t so much talking we wouldn’t be so invested and it makes the actions better and more poignant.
Well I know the next iis posted so I’m on to Ch 22: Eowyn’s Revenge!
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March 24, 2013 at 12:00 AM
You are right,not loving this chapter at all. I just hope that Eden doesn't start to get all lovey dovey about Court and the rest of the "family" and start going along with feeling some kind Butler blood I don't know attachment. Because I really love how defiant she is of them a lot of their ways.Not surprised about what Gabe did. Please don't let Eden change and start to be more forgiving and understanding of the Butler way and blood.Still another great chapter.Waiting anxiously for the next never disappointing chapter.
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March 24, 2013 at 12:00 AM
CH 22
Whenever I’m going to a good slaughter I always request gum! That line invoked images of how Eowyn would prepare to kill a dear in the Bayou.
I am no way shape or form naive, but I didn’t see that coming Gabriel tricking Eowyn and delivering her to the axis of evil. I was on the fence on whether or not to trust him in general but I didn’t expect THIS! Oh and the bit about him wanting to bang Annabelle just one more layer of the hatred between him and Court. Its quiet a mess I almost need note cards: Court fucks Annabelle, Alice wants to fuck Court, Gabe is fucking Alice, Courts is fucking Eowyn, and Gabe wants to fuck Eowyn. It’s so incestuous even if they weren’t all related (and I devour it).
For some reason as I read: “Court was in the corner in deep conversation with a gorgeous girl that looked a little older than me. He bent down and whispered something to her over the soft music.”, my mind produced this image of Court looking up sneakily and he reminded me of James Spader (when he was young and beautiful-not so much now he’s old and losing his once beautiful mop top), obviously he looks nothing like Spader but he does have the same air of arrogance he exuded so perfectly.
Am I the only one who found it incredibly sexy when Court took the blade from his pocket? I imagined the thrust he made releasing her of her binds simulating thrusting into Eowyn. Anyone feel… no it’s just me? Eowyn is a better person that me I felt no pity for Annabelle, she knew better than occur Court’s wrath yet she did it anyway (“Haven’t the years with me taught you fear of me yet?”). How can Eowyn think so little of Court and his heart, obviously he is not outwardly gentle and kind but he has moments of pure kindness and thoughtfulness and they have all be inspired by Eowyn, like the sandwich he made her, I envisioned it as the first sandwich he ever made for somebody other than himself. Yes it was a small simple gesture but for him to think of her, make it and put himself out there to give to her was brave on his part.
Lily Anne so “She” has a name. And Annabelle of all people dropping some knowledge first about the girl between Court and Gabe (I always say if two guys are going to fight it might as well be over a girl-right) and secondly that Eowyn is cold making her consider if Annabelle was right. I think Annabelle is right. What Court has done to Eowyn is horrid but she has freely admitted (at least in her diary) she loves him yet pushes him away at every chance and hurting him as well. If she wants a kinder gentler Court she needs to kind(er) and gentle(r) to him.
Mother Hubbard, I was happy with the little taste Annabelle gave us about Lily Anne but then for Court to tell Eowyn everything and at the place she took her life. He is a young man begging to be loved. The story of Court, Lily & Gabe was as wonderful as it was tragic. I suppose Gabe isn’t the golden boy he portrays (I’m sure he has his own side of the story but Court’s side is what concerns me). That was such a beautiful sight Court making love to Eowyn (I read it three times). But then she had to go and fuck it up accusing him of not really loving her. Perhaps they both are obsessed with each other but that doesn’t negate their love for each other.
This is one of my favorite chapters, Court and Eowyn coupling beats 2 dudes fucking any day of the week.
… I don’t know what will be next but I can’t wait.
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Whenever I’m going to a good slaughter I always request gum! That line invoked images of how Eowyn would prepare to kill a dear in the Bayou.
I am no way shape or form naive, but I didn’t see that coming Gabriel tricking Eowyn and delivering her to the axis of evil. I was on the fence on whether or not to trust him in general but I didn’t expect THIS! Oh and the bit about him wanting to bang Annabelle just one more layer of the hatred between him and Court. Its quiet a mess I almost need note cards: Court fucks Annabelle, Alice wants to fuck Court, Gabe is fucking Alice, Courts is fucking Eowyn, and Gabe wants to fuck Eowyn. It’s so incestuous even if they weren’t all related (and I devour it).
For some reason as I read: “Court was in the corner in deep conversation with a gorgeous girl that looked a little older than me. He bent down and whispered something to her over the soft music.”, my mind produced this image of Court looking up sneakily and he reminded me of James Spader (when he was young and beautiful-not so much now he’s old and losing his once beautiful mop top), obviously he looks nothing like Spader but he does have the same air of arrogance he exuded so perfectly.
Am I the only one who found it incredibly sexy when Court took the blade from his pocket? I imagined the thrust he made releasing her of her binds simulating thrusting into Eowyn. Anyone feel… no it’s just me? Eowyn is a better person that me I felt no pity for Annabelle, she knew better than occur Court’s wrath yet she did it anyway (“Haven’t the years with me taught you fear of me yet?”). How can Eowyn think so little of Court and his heart, obviously he is not outwardly gentle and kind but he has moments of pure kindness and thoughtfulness and they have all be inspired by Eowyn, like the sandwich he made her, I envisioned it as the first sandwich he ever made for somebody other than himself. Yes it was a small simple gesture but for him to think of her, make it and put himself out there to give to her was brave on his part.
Lily Anne so “She” has a name. And Annabelle of all people dropping some knowledge first about the girl between Court and Gabe (I always say if two guys are going to fight it might as well be over a girl-right) and secondly that Eowyn is cold making her consider if Annabelle was right. I think Annabelle is right. What Court has done to Eowyn is horrid but she has freely admitted (at least in her diary) she loves him yet pushes him away at every chance and hurting him as well. If she wants a kinder gentler Court she needs to kind(er) and gentle(r) to him.
Mother Hubbard, I was happy with the little taste Annabelle gave us about Lily Anne but then for Court to tell Eowyn everything and at the place she took her life. He is a young man begging to be loved. The story of Court, Lily & Gabe was as wonderful as it was tragic. I suppose Gabe isn’t the golden boy he portrays (I’m sure he has his own side of the story but Court’s side is what concerns me). That was such a beautiful sight Court making love to Eowyn (I read it three times). But then she had to go and fuck it up accusing him of not really loving her. Perhaps they both are obsessed with each other but that doesn’t negate their love for each other.
This is one of my favorite chapters, Court and Eowyn coupling beats 2 dudes fucking any day of the week.
… I don’t know what will be next but I can’t wait.
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March 24, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Oh my gosh this is an amazing story!!! I stayed up all night just to read everything in one sitting. The story is a bit convoluted but it makes it even more interesting. I'm really curious how you'll develop this story and if Eowyn will ever grow up maturely (like 18+). I'm sorry you don't get a lot of reviews but I'm your new avid reader :) I'm looking forward to your next chapter!