rate_review Reviews

Please continue writing this story. I just read it today for the first time. It is really exciting and I like your character development. The sex is not too abrupt, either. You have a good sense of timing in your plot as well. If the sex is too abrupt, the story would come off like a cheap porno flick.

The only problem seems to be that you failed to give the story an ending. It deserves a spectacular ending, too. Keep up the good work. Please, do not let this tale go unfinished. Thanks for the good reading.

Oh good job! Good intro. You've got me both satisfied (ehem ;-) and intrigued with this beginning chapter.
I like the characters and am interested enough to read the rest of your story.
Keep up the good work.

I like this! There was a good set, good tension, and you did great with the sex scene. I can't wait to see what you do with this next.

This story started off really interesting. Slash in the first chapter was greatly appreciated ;) hope to read more..

Ooh, interesting start. The smut is really hot as well, though I'm also a fan of a more slow build like you've got in your other stories. I'll be keeping an eye on these. ^^

YO XXX, In the middle of your last two stories, You rock and I can't get enough of your stories and you always leave me wanting more! A new fan, G

I love it, hope you're gonna continue;))

interesting so far... could caleb be the leader of the 12? or the reason for the explosion?
if you're gonna put that in your story, your description and reasoning that is motivation for characters to destroy6kill should be very well written and convincible.