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by Aya

person clovermax
schedule January 26, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Don't you just love it... accept your slavery... its good for you.... not. Why do those who have rights ever think that someone ELSE should lose their rights. Loss of rights are loss of rights- to be powerless and have to accept it for your own good- is NOT ever a good idea.
People who think they know better than you and can control your behavior are scary just scary.
person SinfulMind
schedule January 23, 2013 at 12:00 AM
A nice story, original somewhat, but I don't get the politics nor the titles yet.
person clovermax
schedule January 23, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Love the way this is developing. I really feel sorry for Alex. The alphas think they understand but realy do they
person asfdf
schedule January 21, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I know you didnt do it to mess with the readers, but it really breaks the flow. I can understand if it's being used in Speech, but not in actual descriptions. If you're going to use a different set of pronouns I highly suggest isolating their use to when characters speak. It's not like the readers are living in this type of world, only the characters are.
schedule January 21, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Loving the story so far <3.
person ryla
schedule January 21, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I really love your stories and the premise of this one. I was really looking forward to your new characters and support you in your development as a writer. But the pronouns are really incomprehensible to me and wish you all the best in your writing, but I really couldn't understand the third chapter.

It's really frustrating to me as a reader and I think I'll be skipping this one.
person Ls
schedule January 20, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I'll pass on this story then. First time I've ever heard an author brag about confusing their readers
person Poohkie87
schedule January 20, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I think I'm going to like this story more than the other ones... (which is unbelievable to me) I look forward to your updates
person tamingriki
schedule January 20, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Don't you just hate it when you go on vacation and get a cold. Been there done that.

Have enjoyed the story so far. Just not clear on the "A" part of a submissive's makeup.

I would like to see a little more resistance on Alex's part. After all, he has been stripped of his citizenship, no job prospects, etc. If I were in Alex's position, I would fight like hell, the G14 g-nome be damned!

Keep up the good work!
person nine
schedule January 15, 2013 at 12:00 AM
"mine" = YAY!