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for The Vicious Lands

by Kitten-Morris

person Thel20
schedule June 5, 2013 at 12:00 AM
It's a good story, some mistakes here and there but definitely not a bad story. One thing though. I notice that you constantly use the word phallus. My suggestion is that you change it up a little and use other words than phallus to refere to his is manhood, but it's just a suggestion. Other then that it's a good story.

Cya Later:)
Thel20