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November 4, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I am still enjoying this story and am very curious as to where it's going. One thing, you have a number of misspellings or incorrectly used words. Maybe get a beta? I wouldn't mind if you decide to get one. Email is knowthyself89@yahoo.com.
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November 4, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Great story, can't wait for more. Hope Noah and Matt can give eachother what they both need,
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November 4, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Oh I am really enjoying this story so far. I have a feeling this one will be extremely interesting. Please do continue, and thank you for posting this story for us all to read.
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November 4, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I'm totally loving this!
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November 3, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Hey! Just some tips: Don't bold dialogue. Also, only one character should speak in a paragraph-- and on that note, I wouldn't bury the dialogue in so much text, it kind of reads like an RP. Finally, you have two spaces between paragraphs, which kind of breaks the flow. Good luck :)
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November 3, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I have to say, you've gotten my attention. I'm very intrigued to see where this goes.