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Apple Juice...Oh my god, I remember this story!! I am so excited to see the re-vamp, because I did like the first version :))

Raincloud, raindrop; all these cool nicknames you can have with the name 'Rain'.

Rain's fortune cookie fortune sure does sound poetic. And unfortunately true. At least until if/when he decides to tell anyone, despite what Salem said while he was playing on his fears and insecurities.

And I was thinking the same thing as Rain: how does Salem know all this sex stuff? Has he been raped also? Was he also told as long as you enjoy it and get your own satisfaction (so to speak) then it's not rape? Did someone just take what they wanted from him w/o his consent also? After all, he did practically choke Rain; Rain couldn't really protest if he couldn't talk! That's rape in my eyes. I think Salem's just trying to rationalize what he did and trying to make himself feel better by saying if Rain enjoyed it, then it wasn't rape.

I don't remember all of the last installment, so I don't remember about Salem's past, but maybe something like this happened to him. Maybe someone played psychological warfare on his mind also.

Now Rain can no longer feel safe in his own room, never mind his own home. He's feel anxious every time he's home alone, fearing that Salem will be there.

I also think Salem's "gentle" approach this time is screwing with Rain's mind even more. He wasn't violent this time; he was gentle which is probably confusing Rain.

Another awesome chapter Kereliah! :)

Aw, I was totally looking for this story a while ago and got so sad that I couldn't find this or the sequel-ish bit that you also had. I read the original ages ago and I'm excited to see if I can notice the changes. I'm really happy you're re-posting/editing Salem, I loved it the first time around.

I didn't read the original version of this story so i cant compare them, but this version wonderful. The writing is proficient, the point of view telling is not annoying in the slightest. I actually quite like Rain and don't see him as a "girl with a dick" at all. he seems like a person to me. which is a good thing. As for his 'passivity' i don't think it is unbelievable.
As for Salem... interesting! what exactly is he? i have my suspicions but cant wait to find out what is really going on. I love the power dynamics of their relationship... as awful as the rape is... i am going to admit... it is the kind of m/m story that i crave... lol
and i love the way salem just doesnt get it, the way he was going on about how it wasnt rape... lol...
and i definitely think that there is more to Rain then being a "receptacle" for Salem... lol
thank you very much for the time and effort you have put into this story. and thank you for sharing

Oh Awesome chapter!!! I love this story!
I can't wait to know more about Salem he's a bit strange and I can't wait to see how they will buld a relationship
Anyways, thanks alot! Plz continue to post!

wow.
continue.

Really enjoyed the new chapter!! I was totally not expecting Salem to go as far as to break into his house (I thought he might try to get him alone at school or something like that) but I liked how it gave the feeling of 'no escape'. Poor Rain.

Wow, Salem is demented and I'm beginning to wonder if anything is even wrong with him because he seems pretty smart to me.

Great story. Looking forward to the next installment.

Wow don’t I feel privileged, getting singled out for your special attention. I can’t believe how completely you’ve managed to miss the point I was trying to make. The only reason I felt compelled to review in the first place was to tell you that I AGREED with your character’s initial reaction: losing your virginity is a big F***en deal and I don’t care if you’re a girl or boy you can damn well focus on that for a while especially when it results from rape! As for your jab at my stereotyping, would it really have made a difference had I said “generally” or “some” when the point I was trying to get across was that rape makes a person feel powerless? But just for your benefit let me put my thoughts more eloquently: “SOME men equate loss of power and control with a loss of masculinity.” And if you’d like to dispute me on that then go read James M. O'Neil & Michele Harway.

As for my comment on the juice box, if you think that’s what had me quitting the story in the first place then you’re sorely mistaken honey. I think that should be obvious if I was willing to read this story for a second time, having not missed the presence of that juice box in the first two chapters. What did stop me was the complete lack of cohesion and believability to your plot and characters, which I did say improved in the rewrite. I was anxious for this new chapter until I saw your author’s note.

Don’t worry I won’t be making the mistake of sharing my thoughts or sympathies with you again. Please go ahead and delete my reviews. My goal wasn’t to start a war or send a flame. I just wanted to explain myself since I felt unjustly attacked.