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for My objective is set

by alinnapuomi

person eroburn
schedule September 2, 2012 at 12:00 AM
oh man alinna wow!
love this.
man i just wish mark would give in
and take Henry.
and of course it would be super smut
smut over like 5 chapters... the
smuttest of smut
have i mentioned smut lately?
hmm i think john has the clue

maybe mark.. really wanted henry
and since henry was a late bloomer
he got used to suppressing it by then,
and now he doesnt know how to let it out.
schedule August 30, 2012 at 12:00 AM
This story just looks as thoigh it coimld go so many ways, which has me all excited. It's a fantastic start.
schedule August 30, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Ah, I think I get it now. :) So no one would really be 'safe' from Henry once is cycle starts. That's why Mark takes care of him, but not in that way, right? They don't have sex right?

And that's why John can't come back until Henry's cycle is over? I do like John though. He was pretty funny: "Did you lock the door?" I was cracking up! Lock it, Mark didn't even CLOSE it! lol :)
schedule August 29, 2012 at 12:00 AM
nice start.
now, I really want Henry and Mark to somehow end up together.
Also, I really enjoy this sly part of the characters: John with his cunning plan and Mark with his contradictory signs. I love spider-like protagonists who subtly draw in a trap their unsuspecting victims. Mark almost unconsciously pulls in Henry, while consciously rejects and abhors the idea of a family. I kind of hope, since Mark is treading in dangerous territory and plays with fire (or Henry, to be accurate ;P), well, to see Mark fall in the trap of his own making.
person nea
schedule August 29, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Love this story! But please give Henry what he needs, because you are totally torturing him. lol Looking forward to reading the next chapter. :-)
schedule August 29, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I read some of the previously left reviews and it made me smile to see some of the readers new to the genre of mpreg, since the idea of a cycle is unknown to them. Whoever indulged in the mpreg world surely remembers of Lashran peculiarity to go in cycle or werewolf subs go into a mating fever. It's quite a common trait of mpreg stories.

However I have to admit it's the first time I read of a species that feels the URGE to mate/breed even OUTSIDE of their cycle period, when they're actually lucid and in control of themselves. It's like a category of people whose main TRAIT is to LONG for a family. I mean, everywhere there are people who desire to start a family, but here it's like a characteristic that defines the ENTIRE species. Usually in mpreg stories, the peculiarity of a species is the possibility of HAVING children, not WANTING to have children. We are used to consider the decision of settling down as a choice conseguent to a passionate relationship, not the other way around. Here the priorities change: mariage and family first, relationship and compatibility second.
This is the idea I got in the 1st chapter. And I like this new prospective.

I don't know if I make sense, but here it's late and I may not be in full possesion of all my faculties.
person Sarkukka
schedule August 26, 2012 at 12:00 AM
What a nice new fic this is! I liked it a lot. Henry seems like a sweetheart and Mark was really funny. It'll be interesting to find out how their life will sort out.
person eroburn
schedule August 26, 2012 at 12:00 AM
chappy 1
oh poor little him. all this talk of breeding.
me thinks someone wants to get breeded o.o

equally irrevelant note
my mother went on a date friday night.
he ended up being pretty nuts,
he asked her to move in with him etc.
it was thier first date. she told him she was a lesbian
person eroburn
schedule August 26, 2012 at 12:00 AM
somehow i missed chapter 1
unrequited love...
sucks.
matt should fall desperately in
love with him
and give him sole rights
to his pointy stick :)
:)

yap love this story.
person dazedandconfused
schedule August 26, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Thanks for updating so fast! I think Henry has found his mate but what is his name? I don't think you mentioned it. I can't wait to see what happens on their next date. I really love Mark, he's such a riot, and think John is going to be around awhile, LOL.