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for The Boy With the Golden Eyes

by Melsiebug

person Snow-Hurricane
schedule January 23, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I liked it. I read the story after Exit Strategy and liked that Exit's background with Jack was explained.
person teresa
schedule August 17, 2012 at 12:00 AM
This is wonderful. I have no idea how you communicate the caring between Exit and Jack so well when they donb't get a lot of time together, but it's there as clear as day. You've created such a vivd world. Can't wait for the update.
person Rosei
schedule August 3, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 5

Would you like some candy little girl?

Description of bath water so gross! (Thanks for that image!)

Very romantic bedroom scene! Liked the intimacy for such a public place.

Thanks!
R
person Rosei
schedule August 2, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 1

LL,

Great beginning! Lots of emotion!
Really like Jack!
Wow! So much happens in the first chapter!
(Glad there are 4 more to go!)

(You really spoil us readers with stories.)

Thanks,
R
person Rosei
schedule August 2, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 2

SAM! From: A Kind of Alchemy!

Been so long since I've read this
story I forgot how the kids were treated
and the journey coming up!

Can't wait!

Thanks!
R
person Rosei
schedule August 2, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 3

LL,

Ooooh! Owwww!
What a start to their new life inside the big house!
Yeah, while there are sadistic priests and nuns it
always seems as though they're just too put upon
to have decent manners! Just as bad really!
Really liked that turn of phrase when Jack felt that
all the colour was draining from his life.

Thank you!
R

person Rosei
schedule August 2, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 4

LL,

Brutal way to curb a temper! Ouch!
Frustrating to have to curb it while
the nuns get to indulge theirs!

I'm pissed off from here!

Like how Jack can catch up with his brood
and set eyes on Exit by doling out the potatoes!

Thanks!
R