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May 19, 2019 at 12:00 AM
I really like this, even though it is so sad. You manage to pack such a lot of imagery in without ever being graphic. There's an atmosphere to all of it that I can't quite put my finger on, but I certainly get the sense of things being over, and vividness of life being gone.
Mercifully, it seems the character can't quite recall the final moments before this conversation, only the intention. Yet the entire conversation itself takes on the feel of a final, dying dream.
Really skilful writing. And good use of the prompt. The carnation represents so much, but is ultimately fragile. As are we all.
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June 26, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I will never tire of your characters! They always, even in a short piece like this come alive. So glad to see you back with the prompts!
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June 25, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Well done! Great use of the prompt word.
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June 25, 2012 at 12:00 AM
This actually hit home for me on more than one level, and it was both powerful and painful. It's not often that I read something that leaves me completely breathless and with such a tightness in my throat that I wonder if I'll be able to suck in that next much-needed breath.
On a slightly lighter note, like Steven, I am frequently lost and usually enjoy it. A small thing, and one that made Steven very real, but you do that so well.
On a slightly lighter note, like Steven, I am frequently lost and usually enjoy it. A small thing, and one that made Steven very real, but you do that so well.