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September 6, 2012 at 12:00 AM
WANT MOARRRRRRRRRRRRRR>.< this is sooo awesome^^ i can not WAIT for the next update~~~
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September 5, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Wow, I wasn't expecting that! I'm wondering whether that's father or maybe stepfather.
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September 3, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Apart from a few grammatical errors and at times the pace seemed a little rushed, it was a lovely update.
Jeff and Grey have come a long way since the early days of ‘grope and tussle’. The intuitive nature of Jeff is attractive, and his maturing side is certainly appealing. The kind of person Grey needs to accompany him on this undefined journey to possibly everything or nothing.
It seems as if Blake is fallible after all, and there is little sympathy for his predicament (interesting). Has this been an issue before? Has there always been discordance amongst the Paras regarding Blake and his practises?
Hope Fallon is not involved with the theft, only because he seems such a genuine character – but that is more wishful thinking.
Thank you for a great continuation.
Jeff and Grey have come a long way since the early days of ‘grope and tussle’. The intuitive nature of Jeff is attractive, and his maturing side is certainly appealing. The kind of person Grey needs to accompany him on this undefined journey to possibly everything or nothing.
It seems as if Blake is fallible after all, and there is little sympathy for his predicament (interesting). Has this been an issue before? Has there always been discordance amongst the Paras regarding Blake and his practises?
Hope Fallon is not involved with the theft, only because he seems such a genuine character – but that is more wishful thinking.
Thank you for a great continuation.
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September 2, 2012 at 12:00 AM
oh man did i love this chapter.
it was BRILLIANT!
sooo worth the wait.
lol you still have candy?
*steals*
Oh Jeff
Grey so far has a good one in him.
It was ever so more precious
to take care of Grey's needs before
his own wants.
I'm crossing my fingers
and hoping Grey opens up to him more.
This story has lots of depth, and you
are developing your characters nicely.
This chapter leads to so many questions.
Gotta love a mystery where you can't
flip to the end. lol
it was BRILLIANT!
sooo worth the wait.
lol you still have candy?
*steals*
Oh Jeff
Grey so far has a good one in him.
It was ever so more precious
to take care of Grey's needs before
his own wants.
I'm crossing my fingers
and hoping Grey opens up to him more.
This story has lots of depth, and you
are developing your characters nicely.
This chapter leads to so many questions.
Gotta love a mystery where you can't
flip to the end. lol
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September 2, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Wow that was really fascinating^^It really explained a lot about why Grey is so different^^ And I really love the developing romance between Grey and Jeff^^It is so cute!!!! I hope to hear from you again soon!!!! See you!!!!
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August 23, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Like the slow genuine friendship that seems to be growing from the early lust filled actions of Jeff towards Grey. Jeff still has his moments of irrational primordial possessive driven blind rages, where ‘his’ Grey is concerned, but -give him time.
Glad to read that Grey is not the culprit and that Zeke has confessed to the crime with his motives firmly set in his belief that the information contained in the documents should be available for all.
However, can the information in the wrong hands be dangerous for the Paras? Would the document shed more light on the uniqueness of Grey? Will Zeke be willing to share the information with Grey or anyone else? Was he working independently, or is he allied with another group?
Again, there is so much to look forward to as the story unfurls its subplots.
Thank you for another lovely update.
Glad to read that Grey is not the culprit and that Zeke has confessed to the crime with his motives firmly set in his belief that the information contained in the documents should be available for all.
However, can the information in the wrong hands be dangerous for the Paras? Would the document shed more light on the uniqueness of Grey? Will Zeke be willing to share the information with Grey or anyone else? Was he working independently, or is he allied with another group?
Again, there is so much to look forward to as the story unfurls its subplots.
Thank you for another lovely update.
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August 22, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Wow again that was amazing^^ I really liked this chappy!!!! And you really got me curious about this Mechanicians... I wonder who they are!!! Every time when you answer a question that opens up 10 new questions^^I really like that!!!! That keeps the story so faszinating^^Hope to hear from you again soon!!!!
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August 22, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I think Jeff is growing on him
I love this chapter
hmm I can't say I was angsty over
who the traitor was.
I knew it wasn't grey,
and I was desperately hoping
that it wasn't Jeff.
I've never heard that song before
going to youtube it.
Hmm I’ve never heard of that
movie either.
Omg so many new things to think about
a plot is afoot in the land of the paras.
Eating my stolen goods mmm.
hmm I didn't know you spoke Nordic Viking.
If I did I would get 20 foot boat and make
it look like a Viking ship.
dress up like a Viking
and go on raids.
well candy raids at least lol.
I wonder how grey's powers are
going to affect the greater mission?
I hope Jeff gets him to chill a little
then they can have smexy smex smex lol
I’ve decided we shall get into
genetic manipulation
sort of a subset of cloning
we shall grow our own paras
muahahhaa
I love this chapter
hmm I can't say I was angsty over
who the traitor was.
I knew it wasn't grey,
and I was desperately hoping
that it wasn't Jeff.
I've never heard that song before
going to youtube it.
Hmm I’ve never heard of that
movie either.
Omg so many new things to think about
a plot is afoot in the land of the paras.
Eating my stolen goods mmm.
hmm I didn't know you spoke Nordic Viking.
If I did I would get 20 foot boat and make
it look like a Viking ship.
dress up like a Viking
and go on raids.
well candy raids at least lol.
I wonder how grey's powers are
going to affect the greater mission?
I hope Jeff gets him to chill a little
then they can have smexy smex smex lol
I’ve decided we shall get into
genetic manipulation
sort of a subset of cloning
we shall grow our own paras
muahahhaa
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August 18, 2012 at 12:00 AM
portobello road sounds pretty :) and sorta tasty mmm lol
"Jeff moved closer to me so that our thighs touched."-hot
Oh magic in the air.
review for chapy 6.
cause I just read it :)
btw all candy is now property of eroburn (c) yap yap
"Jeff moved closer to me so that our thighs touched."-hot
Oh magic in the air.
review for chapy 6.
cause I just read it :)
btw all candy is now property of eroburn (c) yap yap
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August 18, 2012 at 12:00 AM
how dare that evil sun wake him up
hmm i think i know what jeff is on about
someone's jealous about blake
and no smexy sex sex for him
suxors.
U r 1337
I want a para too.
One that's smexy hot.
hmm i think i know what jeff is on about
someone's jealous about blake
and no smexy sex sex for him
suxors.
U r 1337
I want a para too.
One that's smexy hot.