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There is definitely a change of pace in this chapter – fantastic!

Cannot wait to find out what happens next. Coma already had a plan with Go, so maybe there is somewhere specific he is taking them.

Really looking forward to the next update in the next few weeks.

Love the new photos! And even though Ilya is all edge and cool, personally, Coma (Ferran) is just that little bit sweeter. Saw a b/w photo of him in a hoodie and he is just smouldering.

http://www.diary.ru/~malemodel/?tag=1058352 (then click on the +++) Really no need to say anymore - perfect choice for Coma especially with his mixed heritage.

GO GIRL'S BEEN COMPROMISED!! NNNOOO!! hope she's okay. But another lovely chapter!! Coma is really convenient with his regenerative powers!! And I really like the dynamic between these two! They are so adorable (and attractive)!! I can't wait for the next one!! These two weeks shall be painful! LOVE this story!! Thanks for all your hard work!!

~hitachiintwinlover

(4) Ilya's kissing seems to be a compulsion, not that I could blame him ;) And as much as Ilya enjoys the kissing shouldn't they be trying to escape, just a thought ^.^ This will also put Coma in an interesting position, he seems to believe Ilya but he's also a Bowman, nothing easy about that.

As for the LAMB revelation, it certainly proves that Ilya is living in a very complicated world. I can't even begin to theorize why they would want him to find a cure but have everyone think he's the cause, makes you wonder what they would have done with the cure and what would have happened to Ilya after he was no longer useful. I just hope that trust in Li isn't misplaced, although he must have known something was up but then they simply could have told him lies also.

Quite the conspiracy you've set up, I think you may need a chart to keep track of it all, I can't wait to see what comes next.^^ Also I wanted to ask, I saw the pictures you added to your review responses (which i loved) and I was wondering who is the guy you've got as Ilya, I don't think I saw a name anywhere. Anywho another great chapter, I look forward to the next one :)

Thank you for the feedback and love your site.

The new snapshots of Ilya and Coma are very cool! With their emerging personalities, the models you have chosen are ideal depictions of your characters.

Poor Ilya feeling disorientated after the kiss, but his new focus would help him to think more clearly about getting out alive.

It is interesting to be aware of the one-sided conversations Coma is having, and still be able to predict the possible whole dialogue. Your writing has enough depth of understanding to provide the reader with the possible missing parts. Just give the reader enough to think about – Always nicely done!

Two favourite exchanges between the two without a doubt:

Coma cleared his throat, watching Ilya closely. "Tell me what happened."

"I kissed your dumb ass."
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"No one knows what you look like, or that you have one hell of a mouth."

"Fuck you."

"Point made..."

What can I say – perfect pitch each time.

Like the direction the story is going, the unveiling of the real reason behind Ilya's imprisonment and the subtle physical exchange and dialogue between Coma and Ilya while playing chess, was not only touching but very revealing. Like that, Coma expressed his real feelings about the last few days without fanfare just plain honesty. Yes, he really has a disarming personality.

The ending of this chapter was very sexy indeed. Ilya’s momentary loss of memory was fantastic!

Still not too sure about Li, is he as trustworthy as Ilya thinks he is? Time will tell.

Have truly enjoyed reading this chapter -it has certainly picked up the pace.

Look forward to more very soon.

I'm not surprised about the revelation in this chapter but it made me understand some things. For example the reason why right then they got to him just when he was about to find out a cure and why they were so hard pressed on him being guilty.
Phew, I'm glad that Coma trust him on that and I also would like to have some of the curry and naan. Hah that sounds so delicious.
I also like that you made them eat curry for some strange reason people always make their character eat toast with tomato soup or macaroni with cheese. That's not really a healthy diet and cooking has so much variety and depending on what recipe you use it's really not difficult.
This was a good chapter it clear some things up and at the same time it made me more intrigued with the characters. Now I just want to know what Ilya hold back when he was speaking about metahumans and humans in families.

Thanks for sharing.

Oh Coma, seems like you've got Ilya on your mind- perhaps more so than Ilya has you on his. :)

I can't help but wonder about Li's loyalties, where the heck he is now... And why Ilya is normal when his parents were meta. Also, what exactly is the Burn that metas experience- do they combust? Go mad? Burn from the inside out? Was I not paying attention earlier?

Looking forward to reading more!

I am enjoying the story so far, looking foward to knowing if Li is good or bad since he would have seen the newspapers and known that Ilya, was supposed to be a terrorist.

I'm pissed. Hopefully things will soon change. It's interesting how they only caught Ilya and the rest of the people disappeared. To me it sounds like he is a scapegoat for this organization. I would like to know how they got the information this whole thing is highly suspicious. The only good thing about this chapter is that Ilya and Coma started something and it seems like Coma is a nice guy and could really help Ilya.

Thanks for sharing it's really interesting.

(3) So I don't think I like Bowmen, I'm also beginning to think that figuring out the good guys from the bad guys may not be as straightforward as first thought. Which makes me wonder about this disappearance of Li, with everything else you're also left wondering if he's as good as we thought or if he knew what was going on. So many questions, this is almost more of a mystery than a superhero story.

As for Coma I love how they're trying to let on that he's this traumatized victim when he's obviously the exact opposite of that. He's definitely not the brooding antisocial hero type, I love how friendly outgoing and just plan at ease he seems :) Plus very kissable, seems like a perfectly good stress reliever to me ;) That was definitley a good move although I should think the next one is how to get out of there. Can't wait to see what Ilya's next plan of action is and also what Coma's reaction to what just happened (if Ilya even tells him).

By the way thank you for responding to reviews, it's always nice when a writer takes the time to do that and I always like to see what someone's response is to something I may have said. Looking forward to the next chapter :)

Oh boy. Ilya is going to be in deep doggy doo soon if he can't get out.. But yeesh. These guys are no better thanthe ones he was working for if they're willing to send him to prison for accidental deaths. Looking forward to the next chapter.