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Yay you updated on my birthday! I can't wait to read what happens next

Shit, I'm panicking along with Michael. Ricky is a sick, sick fuck. He totally kidnapped him and is holding him against his will now. Of course Michael realizes he shouldn't have gone with him in the first place. A little too late.

Now I'm on pins and needles waiting to see what happens next. :)

Jeez... I don't usually get mad, but Ricky has made me feel a very, VERY strong hatred for him.
I have a bad feeling things are going to get way worse for Michael.

Love the story, though!
I can't wait for another update!

Yes! Another angsty chapter, my favourite. *licks chops*

Although it was sad about grandma. She was sweet, how she tried to talk to her daughter.

It's very understandable that Michael doesn't forgive Tony, at least not right away, after what he went through at school.

I can't believe Ricky is so calculating and heartless. It does not bode well for the future. Right now, he must seem like a savior to Micheal. He says exactly the perfect things.

More, please. :)

This guy is seriously psycho. He killed grandma? He's sick. Now I really am worried for Michael. I feel that if Michael steps out of line one time, Ricky will be there to "discipline" him. And of course by changing Michael's looks, they won't look suspicious.

Shit, don't they have the Amber Law where they are? Grandma could have reported him to the cops.

Great job with the foreshadowing; both times gave me goosebumps. Although the second one gave me some hope that he'll see Tony again. Some day...

That Ricky is a slimeball. Any grown man (he's fucking FORTY for Christ's sakes!) who's interested in a seventeen year old is bad news.

Yes, Michael is so vulnerable right now b/c he feels so alone and abandoned by all his friends and his parents. Even though his folks didn't throw him out (thank God), they're still not approachable. Michael needs someone he can talk to. Thank God for his grandma. She's too cool. :)

Now, isn't the age of consent eighteen? Or is that in the states? I'm in the states and I know that once a kid reaches eighteen, doctors don't have to discuss issue with the parents; they talk directly to the kid. They can vote and enroll in the military. I don't believe that if they're under eighteen they can just go off with some old geezer to some fantasy place in another country. He would have to get his parents consent. And of course, they wouldn't consent, I'm sure.

Michael's grandmother is a smart lady. She knows that getting his folks involved right away may backfire and send Michael running into Ricky's slimy arms. But she shouldn't wait too long...

Oh I know! Maybe if grandma goes over to Tony's house to try to talk to him. Maybe if Tony apologizes to Michael and Michael feels he's on his side, he'll forget all about scumball Ricky. One can hope....

Great chapter Kolgrim! :)

I really love Michael's grandma!

Now, if he will just listen to her voice of reason. But love and lust when you're seventeen can be stronger than all the other forces in life. Worse, Michael has fallen for not only the attention, but the siren song of adventure and richness that an older man can sing.

At least grandma is not charmed by Ricky. She sees him for what he is.

Without her, he wouldn't stand a chance. Well written chapter! This story just keeps getting more and more interesting!

Hey Kolgrim, I've been trying to find the time to read your "Foolish Games" story. I've heard so many good things about it! :)

But I'm settling for this story! lol I just finished the first chapter and I'm intrigued. I like how Tony is having so many conflicting emotions where Michael knows exactly what he's feeling.

I did notice a couple of typos. I'm only mentioning them b/c this is a rewrite, so I thought if you wanted to fix them you could. About 3/4 of the way thru the chapter you mention Michael's height. You wrote hite, it should be height. Also, ...Tony's face was still red from furry...it should be fury.

Anyway, on to chapter two! :)

Oh poor Michael; he thinks everyone is against him. I can't believe Tony did that. I thought he was Michael's best friend. What a shit. He would rather lose Michael's friendship than try to work thru his own feelings. What an ass.

And Michael's parents; wtf, are they still in the fucking Middle Ages? His father wants to send him somewhere to be fixed? Why, he's not broken. Another ass.

I don't trust this guy Ricky. He's just preying on young kids. Too bad Michael is so insecure and feeling so unloved now. I think if he had some sort of support system he wouldn't be so easily conned by "dirty old men".

Oh, and sorry, I did notice two more typos, one from the first chapter that I forgot: leafs are leaves and wolfs are wolves. Sorry, I know I'm a pain in the ass. I'll stop now.

Awesome story Kolgrim! I'm looking forward to the next chapter! :)

In this chapter Michael reminds of someone on the rebound, so needy of acceptance and affection after taking an ego hit. Not knowing where to turn, and finding strangers safer to risk. Ricky is just the type of man to take advantage of it.

Michael run!

Ricky was written so perfect for his part. Like a stalking lion, patient and experienced and knowing how little Michael knows and just how far to go without scaring him before he can pounce!

Great chapter, C, more soon please. I am really enjoying it. :)