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you are quite good at describing scenes. As to the naming thing, No, I do not pull it out of thin air, Jeovi belongs to PhoenixHelix, but I have a rather fixed set of character names. If you want to look names up to use, I suggest Behindthename (it's a website for looking up meanings of names) it's useful for half my stories. Anyway, I love this one, and I could see the description like it was a photograph or movie. You are talented. ^_^ -WWMH-

Hi silverlining You gave me a great review so I thought I would see if you had any stories on the site so I could return the favor and so here we are :)

I read what you have here and I think it's a great start to what could become a very good story. I like that what you have so far is non-gender specific. I think if you do more you might consider parallel story lines with both male and female leads. I think it would be unique and it would give your readers a choice of which to read.

I did see one and only one mistake :p that being here: "I started leaning forward, trying to meet her halfway, but her lips ((cantered)) in a smirk and her eyes crinkled up in mischief."

The word "Canter" is a kind of run for a horse kind of like jogging for a person; the word I think you were looking for is (canted) which means slanted ;)

Anyway if you continue your story post an add on the forums and I’ll read and re-review. good luck

So cute and sensual~! <3