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wow, that opened a can of worms for me; ..../
The humour was wonderful, the little Jarring things that we take for granted, the things that sink into the background. "Think of it as a screensaver." Brilliant!
Also Kudos for the new formatting, paragraphs closer together really improves the read-ability of the text.
(Oh, and it was so hot. Wow!)

to recall the 'cute ass' part in a rape program scene...
Pauline. you're smittened.
and 'user' you're gonna one day discover that your AI has learned to be human.

onward with your smut scenes! and if there's some semblance of a story line with it, then that's extra goodies for us! :D

Still loving this story! I will write you an email when I'm back home, my Internet est very limited for the next few months. The update was so sweet, I love Paulie's pov

wow, that was something of a wild ride.
I think that you could state his confusion better, with a lttle more description. Something you did VERY well was the AI's part; the confusion, turmoil, not knowing what to do. You did that very well. Could use some work on Finn's emotional changes.
I LOVED the humour, that was wonderful! and the Program/System issues are WONDERFUL, just superb. See private email.

AttackEgg, this was wonderful, I don't remember if I told you that, or not. I remember being shocked that English wasn't your first language, It's so SMMMOOOOTH, without the quirks and hics that make other writers stand out as non-native speakers. This was just masterfully done.

I don't care for the large spaces in the gaps between paragraphs. They are too large, but the may be an artifact of your word editor interfacing with the web-editor when you post them. I've had that problem over on SoFurry.com. I also like how you pace the work, -- the flow of thoughts revealed and reader-expectation. Very well done.
--> side note; I'm not closed minded, and I'm glad, cause this is so very nice, and sweet. I like it. A lot.

as interesting as ever... but paulie? that AI has bad taste lol
I loved reading from the AI's point of view
and as beautifully written as ever also

I wasn't expecting Paulie. I giggled at bit at that.

Oh yeah I thought it was cool how the text changed between Finn and Paulie's point of views.

email is shidoken6@yahoo.com if you ever update it. I f5'ed it but mmmm...sometimes it's a pain to look for stuff.

Is Paulie's AI advancing and becoming it's own person? I'm curious about this. More snark? Or something else?

If I had an AI I would most likely have a tall Russian one to go cosplaying with me and stuff.....yeah I'm weird.

Paulie.
What's going to happen when you know your wants and dislikes. and he asks you to play a scene you don't like. How's your system gonna boot? or will you just 'not compute'? I wonder... really wonder, how their brain's are wired. Since they seem to have a normal digestive system. But heightened nerves definitely means the CNS is not exactly normal. Hmmmmmmmmmmm~ interesting.
Well,
looking forward for you update :) I'd like to be on the mailing list if you don't mind, my e-mail is given (in the review, it's default). :) Thanks~

- nekoii

Oh this is nice. I rather like AI stories, but they're pretty rare. I can't wait to see where the story goes =)

This is so awesome! I've been meandering around for a few months now looking for something that'd make me want to stick around for new chapter and this is it. Finally. Thanks for conjuring this up! Looking forward to more soonish ^_^