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Choking! Now why didn't I think of that? XD Nice, very nice. ;) I'll be looking forward for more kinky chapters.

Mmmm, nice one. I enjoy this kink, although only in writing when it comes to the more extreme forms ;P

Smirk doesn't strike me as the mushy over-emotional type, but he comes across as VERY fond of Yelp, to me. They seem very attached to each other, in their own ways. Am I reading them completely wrong?

I think you did pretty good showing Smirk being more caring in this chapter. I understand not wanting to make it mushy, because Smirk doesn't seem like a mushy person, but I liked him more in this chapter, so I think that was a job well done. Yay for meeting one of the other boys. I'm a little surprised that Choke jumped right into the kinkiness, but then I thought about it and wondered why I was surprised at all, considering the place the Brick is. Plus, it makes sense for the others to introduce him to some of the things before he experiences it with a client. That way he isn't so freaked out and a client doesn't get angry. Hurrah for seeing the Warden for a little bit. I like how he tried to have Yelp entertain himself with a boring book:)

Also, still don't have any plot suggestions but I do have more of a sexy idea. There could be a new client who doesn't know which one of them he wants, so all of the boys are in their cells and they have to impress him when he walks by and each does whatever they think will get him to chose them. For example, one of them could try talking dirty to him, Yelp could be sitting like a dog with a ball near his hands, looking all excited, etc. I know it might sound lame how I described it, but it was sexy in my head:) I like the whole winning affection type thing, at least sometimes. Obviously I would want Yelp to win. He's my favorite so far. Anyway, you obviously don't have to use the idea, but I figured I would share it just in case:)

Also, glad you also don't like rape fantasies and stuff like that. Now I don't have to worry about reading it in your story:)

Oh! There you are! I love your stories, they are such a lovely pornfest, and I've only read the first chapter and I'm not quite sure if this story will be my thing, but I will read anyways. Out of curiosity, I wonder: whatever happened to the hotel? I hope you finish it, I loved that story!

I'm loving your work overall and will keep watching for new chapters, though Smirk's private cell was by far my favorite. Thanks for showing one of my favorite kinks some love.

Well that was an interesting and sexy chapter:) The client seemed pretty nice. I like how you include affection(the nuzzling and encouragement) into the interactions that include some torture. It shows how much Yelp actually likes it, which important to me, especially when he's dealing with people he doesn't know. I can't really get into something, even if its sexual in nature, if it feels like only one is enjoying it. I'm curious to see why the guy always has everyone wear blind folds and doesn't finish himself. Maybe we will find out more about him? Then again, maybe not, Smirk's been there for a while and he still doesn't know who he is. I still don't like Smirk and that kind of bothers me because I don't know why I don't like him. Maybe just his attitude or because he doesn't seem as affectionate? I'm not sure, but I guess it doesn't matter as long as Yelp doesn't end up with him, if he ends up with anyone.

I wish I could give you more suggestions on where to take the story because it seems like it has many directions it could take, but I'm not very good with coming up with ideas unless it's my own story and even then it is sometimes hard. I am glad that we are going to see some of the other boys in the future though:) That's awesome. I also like how Yelp still gets to talk, just not in his cell. I think that's a good balance.

First chapter only: I like the opening, it's spooky and promising and I like the way the crush manipulates the main character into agreeing to something that's clearly rather unwise. Look forward to reading more.

I like the side stories. XD But I always can't wait to read about Yelp. XD
I'll be perfectly happy with whatever scenes you'll write (I hope there's gonna be a lot of them XD)
Some ideas (that you probably thought about yourself XD):
-The Warden training Yelp some more. ^-^ He can fetch. Now he need so learn to "sit", "play dead" and other things dogs do. ;P Eating like a dog. ^-^
-Yelp misbehaving and talking normally and the punishment for it.
-whatever character having an enema? Sounds? Some electroplay?
-You wrote that Glad and Yelp will meet. Will you make Glad fuck Yelp? *drolling while thinking about it, especialy after the side story with Glad*
-A doggy suite is nice ^-^ but I'm really dying having Yelp go around naked or only in his jock and a butt plug of some sorts with a tail attached.
-The Warden fucking Yelp, some double fucking.
-Having Yelp (or whoever) locked in a small cage.
-A "vet visit", some medical play, temperature measuring, looking inside of Yelps ass, taking samples of piss, cum.
Enough. XD I hope I made you think of a few more scenes related to those things above or totally unrelated. XD
whatever you'll do and write, I'll be here to read it.

Wellllll this is certainly the porniest porn I've read in a while. Not all of the kinks here are necessarily my cup of tea, but they're written quite well, and I enjoyed the whole happy atmosphere about it. I also like the dynamic between Yelp (somehow I'd really like to know his real name, although you probably never even gave him one) and Sam/Smirk; Sam seemed a bit dubious at first (I couldn't even tell if they were supposed to be together or if Sam was just leading him on- do we find out about this?) but I quite like him by this point, and for some reason them being cute together doesn't distract from the kink porn. That almost never works too well together, but you pulled it off. Nice.

I'm glad that the characters are showing a connection and that the chapters aren't unrelated. Smut is awesome, but I like some plot, or at least character building, also. I would like to see Yelp experience falling in love with the Warden or a client later. I know he likes Sam, but I'm not really a big fan of his for some reason. I like the Warden better. He's kind of rough, yet caring at the same time. He seems nice, more caring with Yelp I guess you could say. Don't really have any suggestions other than I really enjoy that the characters are connected and we get to see them interact. I think it would be interesting to see Yelp with the other boys and how they would react to him, but I don't know if that falls in line with how you want your story to go. Though I have to say that I hope unlike Glad, Yelp still talks when he's allowed. I'm all for the kinks (though I'm not really into the whole swallowing piss thing) but I'd still like to hear what he has to say.

Yes, I think we got to understand the Warden more in this last chapter and I'm looking forward to reading more:)