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This is getting interesting. ^-^ The Warden and Yelp....? Wow. I never would have thought that something could be going on between them. XD Nice.

Ooh, candle wax. That was interesting. I'm glad that the client was nice enough to kind of calm him down and make him enjoy it. Plus, I learned something. I thought all the melted wax would be the same amount of hot. I didn't know it could just be warm:)I also liked how the Warden said he doesn't understand the kink. Usually it seems like characters either like every single kink imaginable or they only like a few, so it was nice to see that the Warden is probably more balanced. Also, the Warden is sexy:) Just him undressing made me drool.lol. Why the sad look though?Does he not want to have sex with Yelp because it would mean something different to him than it would to Yelp? Or because he wants Yelp to come to him just because he likes him rather than just for sex or is it something else? Maybe after he has sex with Yelp he won't want to share him with everyday client? Hmm, I'm not sure. I felt bad that he was sad though.

Anyway, good chapter. I'm glad you won't abandon this one:)

Oh come on! You're killing me here!
It's pretty endearing how you're going about the relationship with Warden and Yelp. It's a total tease but i'm really curious about what's going on in his head. Wardens a Saint. ;P
I also like the different fetishes you add to each chapter, keeps it interesting! I wonder what else you're going to add.

DON'T LET THEM SELL HIM!!!! :( Or Smirk. Brotherly love or whatever but don't separate them ;_;

Please note that I'm fully aware everyone else is shipping the Warden and I'm the only one sailing this little ship. Look at me, getting all attached to some damn PWP characters, too. >.>

So please tell me that Warden will get to fuck the senses out of Yelp. This has to happen, I don't even care about Smirk and Yelp's relationship. It seems that Warden has some feelings for Yelp anyways. I am begging you, I have my undies in a bunch just thinking about that potential situation! I'd also like to have it be as aggressive and dominating on Warden's part as possible. Please?
By the way this story is lovely, yes, quite lovely... Keep up the good work.

I don't know why you aren't happy with this chapter. I really liked it...I know. I say that about every chapter:) But I liked how you handled the pup play. Usually things like that are awkward for me to read or I just plain don't like it, but like always you made me really enjoy it. I liked how Yelp became more comfortable with it once he got over feeling weird about. It seemed like it would have been fun if you could get over the embarrassment of it. But I'm glad that he wasn't a 100% into it at first, I think that made it more realistic. I also really liked Glad. I think he was a good alpha type dog. He was intimidating and was strong, but like you said, he wasn't a bastard about it, which made me happy. They seem like they became friends, but Yelp clearly still knows whose boss.

Also, is that foreshadowing concerning the Warden?!:) Does he like Yelp in a more intimate way?:) Can you tell how much I love the idea by all the smiley faces I'm using?:)lol. Anyway, I like how you fit that almost conversation in with the Warden. Great possible foreshadowing, but it fit in with how I think his character would try to bring up Yelp possibly staying with him. Oh, I'd love to see the Warden outside the Brick with Yelp if they do end up together. Where does the Warden live anyway? Or does he live at the Brick? You'd think he would so that he could watch over them, but where would his room be? Anyway, I'm getting ahead of myself. That may never happen:)

Anyway, I liked it all! The thoughts, the emotions, the sexy scenes. I love how we get to learn so much about Yelp and how he feels but there's still so much sexiness. Usually I can't read stories with so much sex in them because I get bored or don't care about the characters enough. That is not the case with this story though and I think that's why I like it so much. Also, I think I'm liking Smirk more, so hurrah!

One more thing, don't you go abandoning this story for that other one:) This is the only story I read that updates so fast.lol. But anyway, I've tried writing before and I know how that goes, so hopefully if you start that other story you will still update this one. Great chapter, great story. A thousand smiley faces to you.

Man, you're just way too fast for me with this story. How can anyone write that fast? -.-

So, brotherly love, huh? I was reading them a little more romantic than that (probably stemming from the whole "crush" thing in the beginning), but so long as Yelp is happy with it all is well, I suppose.

One thing; CP, to my mind, means child porn and google suggested the same until I specifically searched for BDSM terms. Just saying that you might have readers who aren't as familiar with abbreviations.

So about the story itself, it was said that "a lot of prisoners don't last this long", does that mean they can call it off and leave if they realize they can't handle it? For some odd reason I like the idea that Yelp is still there by choice, and I say odd because I don't actually mind stories with a lack of said choice. I don't know how that goes together with the fact of prisoners being "sold", though. Do we find out?

Hurrah!I liked the entire chapter:) But the first half was my favorite. I just love the Warden more and more. It was cute when Yelp got his new collar. I liked how he was excited and happy about it and I like how the Warden let him enjoy it and had some fun to.I just liked the mood and feeling of this chapter. It was so happy:) I also liked the second half. They just all seemed to be relaxed and comfortable with each other, there was a sense of belonging that I enjoyed. I have to say that I can't really remember who is who except for the main ones: Choke, Smirk, and Stud. I kind of got confused. I enjoyed it anyway though and I think it can't really be any other way. It was an orgy after all:) I can't remember how many boys there are supposed to be. I thought only five, but are there ten?That's what I was confused about. Sorry, I read a lot so sometimes I have bad memory. Also, interesting...some of Warden's friends are stopping by.

Anyway, I loved the idea of this chapter: celebrating Yelp's accomplishments and how now he really belongs. Is the Warden ever going to have sex with Yelp? Or is that another he has to be ready or prove himself type thing? Hmm, I'm not sure. I'm glad he didn't just have sex with Yelp immediately. I'm not a 100% sure why. It may have to do with him being the boss and I'm glad that he's not trying to take advantage or manipulate Yelp.

Hurrah for two chapters! I understand why you wouldn't want a client to be indecisive, but I'm glad that you like the idea at least a little:) I enjoyed both chapters. I thought the client who licked him all over was funny. It was different and I liked it. Also, I loved the comment that the Warden made about him. I thought that added some more realism to the story. In addition, I really liked how we got to see what Yelp wanted to happen next, even though he doesn't always get it. I like knowing what he wants and enjoys, rather than him just mindlessly always wanting only what the client wants. It adds depth to his character. I also liked how he worked with Stud. I like the guy and all his awesome piercings:) I also liked the older client. He wasn't super involved, but I enjoyed the praise and the kiss on the head that he gave him before he left. Like I said I'm just a sucker for that affection:) Anyway, I enjoyed them both. They fell more in line with the kinks that I traditionally enjoy, though I haven't disliked any of the kinks you've introduced so much that I've disliked the chapter because of it. Which really says good things about your writing because I'm usually really against kinks that involve urine and that type of stuff. It just seems gross. Anyway, looking forward to the next chapter.