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April 12, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Quite an intriguing start: some mysterious events mentioned, answers asked - demons do have questions! - but no answers, so far. Good.
What I didn't like: veeery simplistic "tales" of God,Satan (you meant 'Lucifer'?), angels and humans in the beginning and that of a great war in the middle ("Somehow... after that, somewhere, someone did a big mess and hit the wrong country ... at the worst possible of times and it triggered something that would change the world as we know it..., something evil..., something that was sealed in the depths of the planet itself, never to be again... something you would call the Gates of Hell"). Such important info deserves a more thorough and detailed outline, no? Now it was told only via Akira's vision of the events, like a fairytale.
Btw, Akira is a *male* Japanese name, isn’t it?
That mysterious demon slayer.. demons're helpless and had to concede! Wow.. What's humans' to demon's population proportion? If a demon is slain per killed human? Can't demons repopulate their race quickly?
Demons preoccupied with lack of food - so, there's irony and justice in this world! :)
So, till next time? Omega, the girl and the mysteries. Good luck with your writing!
What I didn't like: veeery simplistic "tales" of God,Satan (you meant 'Lucifer'?), angels and humans in the beginning and that of a great war in the middle ("Somehow... after that, somewhere, someone did a big mess and hit the wrong country ... at the worst possible of times and it triggered something that would change the world as we know it..., something evil..., something that was sealed in the depths of the planet itself, never to be again... something you would call the Gates of Hell"). Such important info deserves a more thorough and detailed outline, no? Now it was told only via Akira's vision of the events, like a fairytale.
Btw, Akira is a *male* Japanese name, isn’t it?
That mysterious demon slayer.. demons're helpless and had to concede! Wow.. What's humans' to demon's population proportion? If a demon is slain per killed human? Can't demons repopulate their race quickly?
Demons preoccupied with lack of food - so, there's irony and justice in this world! :)
So, till next time? Omega, the girl and the mysteries. Good luck with your writing!