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November 30, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Oh please do continue, I wanna learn more about the characters, they are interesting.
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June 4, 2012 at 12:00 AM
How cruel!!!!!! Now I'm stuck waiting for both stories to update soon! I hate cliffhangers!!!! Your stories are so different but yet both are well written! You have serious talent! Now please please have pity and update :)))))))))
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May 23, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Oh he finally rescued him although accidentally^^ And no everything is sweet and compfy and then you leave us with this cliffy!!! What will happen now? Oh I can't wait ^^ See you again soon!!!!
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April 10, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Hey! Great beginning here ^_^
Hmm, at first I thought Tibor was going to stumble upon Jannik and his aggressors while going to Aiden's, but with Hendraa's intervention at the end of the chapter, I guess that's not gonna happen ;)
Btw, I don't like Aiden. At all. He made Tibor look like the "villain", and kind of betray his "family" for a meaningless one-night stand...
Also, please don't hurt poor Jannik too much, he seems like such a sweetheart ☆*:.｡. o(≧▽≦)o .｡.:*☆ Poor kid doesn't deserve it...
Writing-wise, there is just one matter I want to mention ; it's just that I'm not really clear on the passing of time : for example, I assume that the scene in chapter 3 takes place two days after the first chapter? (if that is the case, then I could not really place chapter 2 time-wise, and situate it precisely between chapters 1 and 3 ; is it closer to chpt 1 or 3?...) I thought it might benefit from a more explicit way of putting it, but well, I'm no writer, so it really just is a personal feeling.
Aside from that, I really like the installment, and the two main characters ^_^ (especially Jannik ; a sweet character combined with a rare "breed"/"race" (would a preternatural be offended by one or both of these terms?...), a mysterious past and a troubled present... all the ingredients for a promising plot...)
Anyways, thank you for your work, and I hope we're going to get to read more soon! ;)
Hmm, at first I thought Tibor was going to stumble upon Jannik and his aggressors while going to Aiden's, but with Hendraa's intervention at the end of the chapter, I guess that's not gonna happen ;)
Btw, I don't like Aiden. At all. He made Tibor look like the "villain", and kind of betray his "family" for a meaningless one-night stand...
Also, please don't hurt poor Jannik too much, he seems like such a sweetheart ☆*:.｡. o(≧▽≦)o .｡.:*☆ Poor kid doesn't deserve it...
Writing-wise, there is just one matter I want to mention ; it's just that I'm not really clear on the passing of time : for example, I assume that the scene in chapter 3 takes place two days after the first chapter? (if that is the case, then I could not really place chapter 2 time-wise, and situate it precisely between chapters 1 and 3 ; is it closer to chpt 1 or 3?...) I thought it might benefit from a more explicit way of putting it, but well, I'm no writer, so it really just is a personal feeling.
Aside from that, I really like the installment, and the two main characters ^_^ (especially Jannik ; a sweet character combined with a rare "breed"/"race" (would a preternatural be offended by one or both of these terms?...), a mysterious past and a troubled present... all the ingredients for a promising plot...)
Anyways, thank you for your work, and I hope we're going to get to read more soon! ;)
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April 10, 2012 at 12:00 AM
ok that was really interesting^^ but I really want to know if our sweet praly will be rescued in time^^ See you again soon!!!
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April 2, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Oh that was great that we got to see Janiks side of the story!!!! I really hope Tibor will be able to help him again!!! He really seems to need the protection ^^ Hope to hear from you again soon!!!!
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March 29, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Interesting start^^ I really would love to read more of this!!!!