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August 25, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Yay!! An update! But no!! We don't mean to hurt Billy's feelings! We LOVE Billy. And I don't care if Matt is getting buffer, he will never compare to our delicious thick yummy Billy! She knows she loves him! Matt is just temp. Billy will show he truly loves her. I have no doubt. Billy needs to let down a few walls and just confess to our lovely maiden that he will love and protect her! Always!! #TeamBilly #TeamWeLikeItRough
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August 25, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Oh no! I know you're not attacking me at all LOL! Believe you and me if I know someone is attacking me than I will KNOW :) Here's where I'm getting at. If I said that I like Matt is because I like Matt for me...Hell, give me Matt and Keisha can have Billy. *Sigh* I think that's a fair game to me because I am OH so lonely anyway lol.
I did say that Keisha does love Billy, in fact she's in love with him, but I just hope that Keisha (with the exception of her not seeing Billy and this response is explaining about my last review and then I will post another review for your new chapter which I can't wait to read)gives Billy a choice either it's her or the crazy stuff he is doing like drugs and so on. I do see billy as the alpha male of being the protector and wanting to take care of Keisha but it's the way how he's doing it, you know? You can't keep hitting Matt and threatening his life, that's not protecting your girl and even though he was hurting Matt, Billy was hurting his girl. Now her brother, he said what he said about Billy like a big brother that he is and just for Bill say to him if her brother goes near her too Billy would kill him in front of his sister. Again she didn't know what was said and I think if she had found out then she would be pissed and tell Billy either way that's my brother and you don't make that kind of threat against my family member. I just think that it's up to Keisha given her brother that choice of seeing her brother or not cuz her brother needs help too darn it.
Again what Billu thinks is protecting Keisha from "danger" is actually hurting her and wanting to push Billy away and he got a taste of hit with the Matt getting beat up situation. I may SAY that I don't like Billy, but then again I always say I don't like something and end up liking them like I never liked BBQ on my ribs and like last year I ended up liking it. I don't mind if he (Billy) protects Keisha from harm or like if a random guy is firting with her...I don't care but don't be the guy up unless that guy doesn't back off. If Billy wants Keisha than open up and let her in and change the environment that you are stuck in and be with your girl because it will interfer in her life and she may not want that. If she does then...oooh child God bless her pure soul.
I know my review is loooong and I'm sorry but I don't EVER want you think that I am down playing your story at all. You don't understand how WELL you have written your story. I mean it hits home with me because I have a sibling who is like Billy and he had so many Keishas that never put their foot down that's why I get into the story. In addition to that it's like you are posting a story that may have happened to either your sister or your girlfriend and we are talking face to face about what's going on in their lives and it's like me saying what I think and feel like Charlie.
Like I said before whatever how the story turns out, I will say that you are the WOMAN and you wrote that story to the teeth that I could see in movies right now. It's a discussion that you and I are having and if it's a discussion then you should know that your story is banging. Now, I'm gonna read chapter 22 and my review will be short...I promise you that.
I did say that Keisha does love Billy, in fact she's in love with him, but I just hope that Keisha (with the exception of her not seeing Billy and this response is explaining about my last review and then I will post another review for your new chapter which I can't wait to read)gives Billy a choice either it's her or the crazy stuff he is doing like drugs and so on. I do see billy as the alpha male of being the protector and wanting to take care of Keisha but it's the way how he's doing it, you know? You can't keep hitting Matt and threatening his life, that's not protecting your girl and even though he was hurting Matt, Billy was hurting his girl. Now her brother, he said what he said about Billy like a big brother that he is and just for Bill say to him if her brother goes near her too Billy would kill him in front of his sister. Again she didn't know what was said and I think if she had found out then she would be pissed and tell Billy either way that's my brother and you don't make that kind of threat against my family member. I just think that it's up to Keisha given her brother that choice of seeing her brother or not cuz her brother needs help too darn it.
Again what Billu thinks is protecting Keisha from "danger" is actually hurting her and wanting to push Billy away and he got a taste of hit with the Matt getting beat up situation. I may SAY that I don't like Billy, but then again I always say I don't like something and end up liking them like I never liked BBQ on my ribs and like last year I ended up liking it. I don't mind if he (Billy) protects Keisha from harm or like if a random guy is firting with her...I don't care but don't be the guy up unless that guy doesn't back off. If Billy wants Keisha than open up and let her in and change the environment that you are stuck in and be with your girl because it will interfer in her life and she may not want that. If she does then...oooh child God bless her pure soul.
I know my review is loooong and I'm sorry but I don't EVER want you think that I am down playing your story at all. You don't understand how WELL you have written your story. I mean it hits home with me because I have a sibling who is like Billy and he had so many Keishas that never put their foot down that's why I get into the story. In addition to that it's like you are posting a story that may have happened to either your sister or your girlfriend and we are talking face to face about what's going on in their lives and it's like me saying what I think and feel like Charlie.
Like I said before whatever how the story turns out, I will say that you are the WOMAN and you wrote that story to the teeth that I could see in movies right now. It's a discussion that you and I are having and if it's a discussion then you should know that your story is banging. Now, I'm gonna read chapter 22 and my review will be short...I promise you that.
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August 25, 2012 at 12:00 AM
My review on Chapter 22:
OH MY GEEZ! This is like a lot for me to take in. I love the conversation that Keisha has with her brother and just like she said that she may not agree with what her brother is doing, but that's his life like it's whatever she does in her life is her choice too. Ummm...but boo! I WANT MATT ALL TO MYSELF AND WHY NOT MY HIP THAT HE'S KISSING LOL! I still think that she's in love with Billy but I don't know because I am on my toes and I don't know what you're gonna do with this story. You're giving me a heart attack right now :)It's just so damn good (pardon my French).
I hope that Sam doesn't get killed even though he's troubled...I don't want to see him getting killed. I don't even want to Billy to be killed. The whole Billy and Keisha incident that was intense but Layla...if that girl is looking for a good face she better stop playing before I knock the crap out of her.
All I can about this chapter is WOW! But, I still want Matt all to myself. Anyway, good job and next time you update I am gonna have a bowl of popcorn and soda. Keep up the good work!!
Side note: Have you ever think about posting this story in another website. There's one website that I think you will love so much and it's called valentchamber.com. Your story will be so loved over there trust me. There are a lot of great stories over in that site and I would recommend that you think about that.
OH MY GEEZ! This is like a lot for me to take in. I love the conversation that Keisha has with her brother and just like she said that she may not agree with what her brother is doing, but that's his life like it's whatever she does in her life is her choice too. Ummm...but boo! I WANT MATT ALL TO MYSELF AND WHY NOT MY HIP THAT HE'S KISSING LOL! I still think that she's in love with Billy but I don't know because I am on my toes and I don't know what you're gonna do with this story. You're giving me a heart attack right now :)It's just so damn good (pardon my French).
I hope that Sam doesn't get killed even though he's troubled...I don't want to see him getting killed. I don't even want to Billy to be killed. The whole Billy and Keisha incident that was intense but Layla...if that girl is looking for a good face she better stop playing before I knock the crap out of her.
All I can about this chapter is WOW! But, I still want Matt all to myself. Anyway, good job and next time you update I am gonna have a bowl of popcorn and soda. Keep up the good work!!
Side note: Have you ever think about posting this story in another website. There's one website that I think you will love so much and it's called valentchamber.com. Your story will be so loved over there trust me. There are a lot of great stories over in that site and I would recommend that you think about that.
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August 24, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I love this story. I do not know how you are going to end your story but I hope Keisha gets with Billy.I think Keisha's character is in love with Billy and it will be logical if she ends up with Billy. On a personal note I
don't think Matt is worthy of her because he put her in danger and cannot protect her, but Billy can. However This is only a story and it is your story. I will read it regardless and rate it after the whole story is finished I only ask as a writer and a reader that you end it how you want to and not how every body else wants it to end not the Matt fans or the billy fans.
don't think Matt is worthy of her because he put her in danger and cannot protect her, but Billy can. However This is only a story and it is your story. I will read it regardless and rate it after the whole story is finished I only ask as a writer and a reader that you end it how you want to and not how every body else wants it to end not the Matt fans or the billy fans.
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August 23, 2012 at 12:00 AM
This story! I have to come back to it so much and I reread and reread and I ALWAYS freak out at the last chapter, I have to admit I really like Matt, but Billy's a badass and as much as he angers the feminist in me, the man just reeks sex lol, but so does Matt, it's like you are in my brain picking out the qualities in men that just make my panties drop lol
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August 6, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I just wanted to creep out from the darkness and say that I love your story. I get super excited when I find out its updated. I also wanted to say TEAM
BILLY!!! I love Billy to pieces!! Yes he can be an ass at times but he is the highest male on the food chain and he did the whole bad boy thing way before his chocolate love drop so it's hard to break a habit like that. But he is making huge strides for her that she doesn't see. And I can understand where Keisha is coming from. When you love someone (or are damn near close) you can't just wipe your hands of them. More Billy love! Keep up the awesome work!!
BILLY!!! I love Billy to pieces!! Yes he can be an ass at times but he is the highest male on the food chain and he did the whole bad boy thing way before his chocolate love drop so it's hard to break a habit like that. But he is making huge strides for her that she doesn't see. And I can understand where Keisha is coming from. When you love someone (or are damn near close) you can't just wipe your hands of them. More Billy love! Keep up the awesome work!!
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August 5, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I didn't say I hated Keisha; I was tired of Keisha to a point where I am tired of her being manipulated by Billy and not standing up. I mean I'm glad she did in this chapter, but I don't believe her when she said that it was over between her and him. She'll run back to him like always and doing the humpty dumpty. I mean if she said to Bill not to talk her, why does she STILL wants to talk to him?
The thing is that she loves Billy and I hate to see good guys losing, like Matt, when it comes to a girl that they love. It's like bad boy rules and good boy drools. Either way, if you get into Billy's family history, it doesn't excuse the fact that he acted the way he acted. He has time to grow, if he WANTS to grow. You make a destiny with your own life and what you choose to do with it falls on you and you only; not your parents. Everybody makes a choice and have to take responsibilites of the choices he/she makes. So point the blame at yourself and not to others because if he didn't like the treatment he received from home, why continue on that legacy? Why not do what's right and treating others with respect that you never received from your birth place but want to received from others in a positive way? But with all that said and done, I am STILL for Matt until the story ends.
If you put Keisha and Billy together at the end of the story, then good. I don't think they should be together, but it's your story and either way I'm gonna read it till the end and say, 'This is the best damn story that I have ever read in my entire life!' LOL!
Keep up the good work because you are doing a good job with this story.
The thing is that she loves Billy and I hate to see good guys losing, like Matt, when it comes to a girl that they love. It's like bad boy rules and good boy drools. Either way, if you get into Billy's family history, it doesn't excuse the fact that he acted the way he acted. He has time to grow, if he WANTS to grow. You make a destiny with your own life and what you choose to do with it falls on you and you only; not your parents. Everybody makes a choice and have to take responsibilites of the choices he/she makes. So point the blame at yourself and not to others because if he didn't like the treatment he received from home, why continue on that legacy? Why not do what's right and treating others with respect that you never received from your birth place but want to received from others in a positive way? But with all that said and done, I am STILL for Matt until the story ends.
If you put Keisha and Billy together at the end of the story, then good. I don't think they should be together, but it's your story and either way I'm gonna read it till the end and say, 'This is the best damn story that I have ever read in my entire life!' LOL!
Keep up the good work because you are doing a good job with this story.
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July 31, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I love ur story!! U manage to create such an interesting story congrats. I am really hating Keisha rite now :( she's sooooo spineless! Hurting poor Matt like that, her brother, aiden. When is she going to realize that billys an ass?? U hav managed to get me emotionally attached to this story. That's not an ez task u know! Ur a great writer keep it up!
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July 30, 2012 at 12:00 AM
You know what? I am at a point that I am tired of Keisha and her being so naive. I don't know why her family saying that she deserves to be alone, but maybe Damon wanted to see her and just the fact that Billy said that he will kill her brother in front of her just baffles me and not only the brother but Matt too and you know the reason why they walked away from Keisha. If she's not careful, then Charlie will walk away. It's kind of funny how she gives so much hell when Matt beats up Billy, but when Billy does the same thing...she gives him a little hell and then sleeps with him. I just don't understand it. I am not a fan of Billy and never will be a fan. I am all for Matt up and down, but my only problem with him is that he's needs to fight back that's all...so does Keisha and I'm glad that Matt cut ties with her and now she feels as though she's the victim. No, you put yourself in that situation, so you have to fix it. She played Matt up and down and didn't care about how he feelings.
Anyway, I love love this story. When I read the last chapter, I was like 'Keisha is getting on my nerves, I'm not gonna read it.' But then I was like, 'Wait a minute, THIS IS JUST A STORY!' You make these characters come to life and I am taking it to the point of them being so real. I mean, you are a gifted writer and I can't wait for the next chapter.
Anyway, I love love this story. When I read the last chapter, I was like 'Keisha is getting on my nerves, I'm not gonna read it.' But then I was like, 'Wait a minute, THIS IS JUST A STORY!' You make these characters come to life and I am taking it to the point of them being so real. I mean, you are a gifted writer and I can't wait for the next chapter.
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July 26, 2012 at 12:00 AM
You can NOT end a chapter like that! I am literally wanting to pass out myself! and I'm still trying to decide if i love Billy fear him, or want to castrate the man!lol