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for Vengeance Painted With Lust

by SaydenEmery

person Anon
schedule March 23, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Update soon love:))
person dutsada
schedule March 22, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Welcome back!!!!! I missed you so so much... Like the continuation! The demon king does still posses a softness for Surian.. Gosh the poor boy is so hurt..
schedule March 21, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Ha! Serves him right!!!! That jerk deserves to lose his son after that!

Wanted to point out: you should only use an apostrophe when referring to a noun, or and adjective or an adverb that is directly related to the noun you are describing. I'm just pointing this out because there are a few spots that you wrote "Human's" when the " ' " didn't need to be there.

So far so good; on to chapter 2!!!