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Ch. 16: OMFG!!! Ok, first, thank you for clearing up my mistake about who said who loved whom. I went back and read it again. DUH!!! lol. Second, WHAT A F'ing Chapter this was!!! Oh, I know, things aren't going to be smooth sailing between Michael and Edward. And this chapter proved it. God I was so fucking mad at Edward!! I wanted to hit him so bad! But damn it! he can be so freaking sweet too. When Michael asked him not to fuck anyone else, he said "ok"...awwwwww :) And thank gawd Michael refuses to back down when it comes to Edward. No matter how hard he tries to push Michael away, he's not budging. THAT is true love and THAT is what Edward needs to see in order to trust Michael's feelings for him.

Second, Dominic a/k/a Steven is a scary dude the way he threatened Aidan! (I'm a assuming it's Dominic.) But still, he should tell Edward about the phone call then refuse to help him. I wouldn't be able to put my family's lives on the line for information.

Second, Sybil is such a bitch!! I know she's trying in her own sick and twisted way, to connect with Edward. But damn! She continues to flabbergast me!! And Edward won't back down. I love him for that. He can't afford to give an inch to her or his father. And I'm shocked that she gave him power of attorney. Wow!!!!!!

Ch 17!!! OMG OMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOJGOMGOKM:LJKL:DM:SL Shit!!! Ok, first of all, amazing chapter. Just amazing!!!! I was howling! I'm telling you, HOWLING when Michael let Liz and her father have it with his little comebacks! This is why I fucking adore Michael. Hell, adore is not a strong enough word! He's sassy and impertinent and I love how he sticks up for Edward and himself. Yeah, he may not be a titled Englishman, but he's not going to take their shit! Oh and how I love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! SQUEEEEEEE!!!

OH!!!! And I love how you are slowly bringing Sybil and Edward together. It's very subtle which makes it more believable, considering their past. When Edward said he thought his mom was trying to bond with him and it scared him, it scared me too!! lol. And she WAS flirting a little with Michael!!! She's starting to be a little charming and I don't like it! I want to continue to hate her!!! lol. But for Edward's sake, I am hoping they can mend some of the fences between them.

And oh shit!!!! When Edward's father came home and waltzed into the room I about died! The nerve of that arrogant bastard!! And his diss of Michael..well, Michael let him have it right back. I'm still laughing and SQUEEEEING in my chair over it!!!

Edward NOW says he thinks he loves Michael! Michael looked stunned!! He frowned! Why????? He's not upset his he? I thought he would be happy!!!

AND YOU LEAVE OFF WITH THE MOTHER OF ALL CLIFFHANGERS! Antonio Castellani is in England!!! Oh my GAWD!!!!!!!!!!!!! hflsdjfksdjflkj And he's tailing Robert!! So it wasn't Davide whom Dominic saw in the hoodie, it was Antonio???!!!!!!!!!!! He's there to take Robert out!! For revenge of Paula's death!!! Omg Omg Omg! That little shocker was brilliant! Truly, my mouth is still hanging open!!!

Oh my gosh! Antonio is probably out for revenge because of what happened to Paula! I hope he doesn't get hurt or worse killed that would destroy Michael! I wonder when Michael will find out!

Edward and Michael are so cute together and don't know it but kind of act like they are a married couple, LOL. Please don't tell Edward that though because he would only deny it.

I am still hoping that Mason and Cedric don't get killed and live on possibly in another story!

I am tired had a bad day and busy weekend planned.

Just wanted to say how much I am enjoying your story. You have spoiled us and I am already worried that there will no longer be daily updates. I especially like the other stories you reference at the begining of each chapter though I was thoroughly frustrated to find after fruitless searching that the Harry Potter/Draco stories were no longer available. While I loved the books and movies I was never tempted to seek out the fanfic until you posted those teasers. There are so many twists and turns in your plot that I cant keep up and everyone seems connected in a convoluted way. I love that Edward and Michael found each other again. To actually witness Edward's defences crumble under Michael's persistence, and then to hear him realize and confess his love...priceless. My absolute favorites of all the new characters are Cedric and Mason. I love their dynamic and how they unknowingly complete each other. I really hope Mason will be able to protect Cedric. Dave is becoming more human because of Benedict, but I suspect that he will regret his honesty because there is probably more to Benedict than meets the eye. Dominic is sinister and I am convinced that he was behind the serial killings, but unless he is simply a raving psycho, I dont get his motive yet. Robert is just a pathetic puppet, flawed beyond redemption because he loved and protected a weak man, sooo disappointing.

On the topic of Deviant Art, unfortunately, I don't know how you would do that but maybe you could check some other stories that have it. Maybe, some authors who use it and are reading your story can help you! The author's that do use it have a link on their profile for Deviant Art relating to their stories. Perhaps, there is also information about it in the forum but not sure.

I know that, Avernion, has a link on her profile so maybe you could check it out.

I really dislike Mason. He to forcfull, I hate forcefull people.
Did you know you can make people go crazy with just one word? Dominik asking Robert not to disappoint 'us'-them. Who is us? and what is Dave up to if Benedict is only a pawn on his chess board?
On more thing that came to my mind. before the dead body was dropped infront of the police station, didn't dave tell them to watch the news that night? wasn't then wenn the accident with the boy and st. Johns was reported? could it be that dave ment to tell them to watch the news for the at accident. Could it be that the accident wasn't one at all, but a hit to get st. johns in trouble?
I can't wait for updates!

A resistant Edward and a determined Michael - Edward knows that being with Michael will no longer be ‘just sex’, it will be about making love the person he loves, leaving him exposed and receptive to ‘feel’ the love that Michael has for him. With his abilities – drowning springs to mind. But we shall see!

Mason, for all his wonderful ‘attributes’ and good intentions is severely lacking in any form of decorum: politeness, restraint or respect. As well as sensitivity, compassion, social and basic communication skills, geniality…need I go on, only have so much space to review! And is he actually helping Cedric? He will be a physical presence, a barrier, between him and Robert, so yes. But psychologically, not too sure - Having fun with these two!

Your internal dialogue once again, so true to the characters. It is a wonder how you can keep them all so individual and distinctive, never overlapping - Amazing.

And on that note, we have another two wonderful chapters, focusing on the chaos of love, even Dave; taken aback by the nice elderly lady. Now…about those plans?

Well done – as always!!!!

Ch. 14: I'm still totally SQUEEEEING at this little exchange between Edward and his "egg donor":

“Kate Taylor’s son is my brother. I don’t care if he’s a bastard, I don’t care that Father cheated on you when he fucked her. I will not offer my brother a bribe, and I don’t give a fuck if there’s a scandal or not. I want to get to know him, if you like it or not. Did I make myself clear now?”

She stared at him as if he’d grown a second head. In a very tiny corner of his brain he registered a fierce satisfaction that he had rendered her speechless, but he felt too exhausted to really acknowledge that.

“You’ve changed a lot,” Sybil said finally and there was something in her eyes he couldn’t read.

“I also don’t give a fuck about what you think. Or if you approve of what I do. And now I think you need to lie down. You’re white as a sheet.”

Love it!!!!!!!!!!!!

So Dominic is watching Davide watch Robert. So interesting!!! lol. No, Robert can't kill Cedric! Poor boy!!

Ok, the whole phone call between Michael and Edward was just painfully awkward. Again, Edward fails to throw Michael a bone. He's shut himself down emotionally. He has Michael an hour away and all he had to do is say "I want to see you" and he would have sped to his side. But no, he couldn't do that! He thinks he would be burdening Michael if he did? When in fact he's adding to Michael's problems by NOT asking him!!! And he's just making himself suffer more for it.

And who is the guy that Edward is going to be busy with????!!!! I'm glad it's not going to be Aidan though. But still!!! Sigh.

Ch. 15: OMG OMG OMG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! This chapter made all sorts of HAPPY!!!! At first I was like, NOOO!! Michael don't go to Edward's. And then Edward's reaction to Michael showing up really pissed me off. But Michael wore down his defenses and He finally let Michael in his heart again. And I love how Michael stared down Edward's "egg donor" and invited himself to stay there. Michael being there is exactly what Edward needs. Now he has someone on his side to help him deal with his family. And the person he should be turning to when he's needing release/affection.

AND OMFG!! He told Liz he loves Michael. I nearly passed out in my chair from shock and then happiness! I know it's going to be rough between them because the "egg donor" saw them kissing and I trust her like I would a scorpion. But finally, they are back together!! :)

And the whole thing with Mason and Cedric was awesome! Mason moved in with him and told him that he's in danger. He's so sweet! He definitely has feelings for Cedric. This is something Robert won't expect when he tries to kill Cedric.

God, this story just keeps getting better and better!

so much love for this chapter.