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for Par for the Course

by ChloroformCandy

person lividifire
schedule December 5, 2012 at 12:00 AM
wow, good one!
person RJaneyP
schedule January 25, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Please put spaces between each of the men's speaches. Also place an paragraphe every once in while. It makes tale easier to read. Also, it might be more interesting if you discribed what the men looked like to each other.
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