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Ch. 2: This chapter was fantastic as well! From the intense scene between Michael and Anna to Edward questioning Mr. Garrick. I was wondering how you were going to make Michael's girlfriend become a "non issue" so that it opens the way for Edward and Michael's "male bonding"...lol. I loved how Michael got incredibly mad at her for going behind his back to speak to his mother about getting married, kids, etc. And how he just sat there while she broke things off with him. He couldn't care less!

I was at the edge of my seat during Edward's questioning of the Garrick's. I thought that was brilliantly written. AND now that Edward knows where Mrs. Garrick works out, he can show up there to question her without her husband being around.

This story has a Mentalist-type feel which I love.

Ch. 3: Wow again! This story has moved up to my top 5 favorite stories out of the 150 that I'm following right now. I simply love it!!

I am really enjoying Edward's internal dialogue. It's so funny when he's sizing up other men and when his gaydar goes off. And then he comments on how horny he is. He definitely needs to get laid. I also love how he compares himself to Adam Preston as being the same (high maintenance.) I do hope they call on Edward with "more information"...lol.


Anyways, please do NOT drop this story! I have over 20 stories that I started to follow on here that have been abandoned by their authors. Some of them were very, very good too. So I'm begging you, please, please keep on writing!

I'm impressed. Firstly, the pace of the action is great, there is no dull moment, not even one redundant sentence. The murder case really has me wondering and intrigued. Secondly, each of the characters has their own unique personality so they don't come out as flat. Edward is sharp, witty and very mature. I love the way he handles Michael's asshole ways without lowering himself to insults and snarky replies just for the sake of trying to show the narrow minded cop who's the boss. Then again, I can understand Michael's frustration - his reaction to Edward's supposed powers is very natural, even more so when it seems that the shmuck managed to almost effortlessly obtain valuable information while the detectives, despite their hard work, were stuck before the wonder boy appeared. Finally, I love the UST, here better known as "male bonding". Hehehehehe. Keep up the great work!

Words can't even express how much I love this story. It grabs you, pulls you along and doesn't let go - even in "quiet" sequences, the suspense doesn't let up for a minute. It's also incredibly well-written, so much so that you forget you're reading a story; it's like watching events actually taking place and hearing the characters speak. I think everyone who reads this will be in for a real and rare treat.

Awesome work here! I love the character dynamics and plot here, keep up the great job!