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OMG.....im freaking here!!! Can't wait for the next chapter!!! The suspense is killing me already!!!

Your writing isn't awful or anything, but I wonder: why Japan? What about your story is anything like Japan?

Your story reads to me like the characters are Hollywood American with Japan plopped on top of them as a setpiece and a few bits of fangirl trivia thrown in. If you want to make a Japanese story, that's great - but the characters act like manga characters here (which you should know is rather over the top) with the same localized trivia ("regional dialect"). What "regional dialect" does he have? Does it translate properly to the sort of sleazy almost-Southern US dialect you write him with? Your character complains about his grammar in a sentence where he doesn't make a single grammatical error - he's just speaking informally.

If you don't care about writing and are just throwing this out there as idle nonsense then you can rightly say it doesn't matter. But if you desire to improve your writing you can easily start with ditching the manga overlay - and more generally stop relying on manga tropes to prop up your story - and let your own words tell the story you have to share!

Another killer chapter....and just when I think we are getting close to having everyone close to paired off equally you throw in another character!!! Can't wait to see where that goes though.....these shadows creatures are rather scary especially now that we never know when they are gonna decide to strike the group again!!! Anyway I've decided this is definitely one of my absolute favorite stories.....looking forward to the next chapter!!

Awesome another chapter!! I was hoping Flare would find some way to break thru Wes' tough exterior.....I mean they are ideal for one another, though I didn't imagine she was going to have a similarly screwed up story!!! As always you didn't disappoint with the new chapter....keep ip the amazing work and i'll continue reading faithfully!!! :)

I've been trying to give positive feedback everytime I read....however one of my responses was posted as Anon and I just wanted to make you aware it was from me!!! :)

Thanks for the new chapter.....I stopped everything so I could sit and read it!!! I love the connection between Nolan and Lily and am excited to see where it goes after that little display of affection Cherish walked in on .....LOL!!! As for the rest of the band members I can't wait to see what happens between the characters you've already connected and the four you haven't......I can see both groups paired off equally and can many things happening between them all! However o do believe D's mom needs to get her evil self taken out......quickly!!! Anyway I love this story and can't wait for more!!!!

Wow this story gets better as you continue writing it and im completely addicted to this story and im constantly checking back for updates.....can't wait to read more!!!!

i love the story so far and would love to read more thankz for the update....when do you think you will up date your story The Prodigy need to know what happens next.