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January 14, 2012 at 12:00 AM
That first paragraph made me smile since I spent the afternoon trying to get my new HD box to talk to my tv, I'm convinced technology hates me ;)
Definitely got a giggle over the fact that you had this 'tough' biker guy who gets freaked out by a video game witch, it's kind of cute :) I also loved the characters and the idea of a biker and a detective, it does bring up all kinds of questions of how they ended up together but they worked well.^^ It was a good story and the smut was rather steamy I'm glad I found it ^_^
Definitely got a giggle over the fact that you had this 'tough' biker guy who gets freaked out by a video game witch, it's kind of cute :) I also loved the characters and the idea of a biker and a detective, it does bring up all kinds of questions of how they ended up together but they worked well.^^ It was a good story and the smut was rather steamy I'm glad I found it ^_^
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January 13, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Although a well written piece, I think you are losing readers due to the spacing. The paragraphs are so close together it's hard to focus on each sentence and it causes 're-reads' of the line above it. (the eye-crossing effect) :)
The actual writing style was rather nice (love your word choices)Nice and quick and to the point.
A very cute story.
hope my review made sense: My First one! I read your story because I noticed the number of hits but few reviews even though the summary was interesting. Thing the main problem was the spacing.
The actual writing style was rather nice (love your word choices)Nice and quick and to the point.
A very cute story.
hope my review made sense: My First one! I read your story because I noticed the number of hits but few reviews even though the summary was interesting. Thing the main problem was the spacing.