rate_review Reviews

I've really enjoyed reading your story, both chapters, but I'm fearful that like so many other authors on this site and another one which I'll not name that the story will stop here with no other chapters written. I hope this isn't the case, but it's nearly 12 months since the last chapter was posted, I fear that this is the case, sadly. I'm not one who can write stories, so I have no idea what goes into such, but would dearly like to see this story continue.
Yours. Terry

This story is awesome!! (I'd be happy to help edit for you if you would like btw, I noticed a couple things)... I love this story!! Michel, Syd, Brett, Zoe... I can't wait for the next chapter!! How often do you update? I just finished reading part one and two...

Wow! What a cliffhanger. XD

Constructive Critique {I'm published now, so I'd like to offer some constructive writing advice.}
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With both characters in first person and so many scenes in this chapter, the head hopping made me dizzy. To make it easier for the readers to not get so confused, why not write one of the characters in 1st person, and the other in 3rd person? That way it signals clearly we've jumped point of view to the other character, and is less head hopping.

Great new update! I really hope that Sydney keeps fighting him for a while longer. Forcing someone to marry you because you threaten to take away their child isn't good. I do want them to end up together though!

YAHHHH!!! so glad you are BACK!! please don't be gone for so long again. I LOVE LOVE LOVE! this story and your writing!. so with that said.. UGH!! Micheal is such a dick!! i mean really.. i know she didn't tell him about the baby, but she had good reasons too. and it wasn't like his mom told him any sooner. But.. i feel so bad for syd.. Seriously he is pushing her so hard and being a total dickhead.. So she is going to leave her life and her family and friends behind to live in mexico for him.. She has already turned her life upside down.. I wish she would do something crazy, like take the baby and run. lol.. And what about Brett!! i love him, and now she won't see him. :( I don't know in a way i wish she and her dad would fight. He is so cocky and being such a prick i think he should'nt get what he wants. And if something happens to her when she is mexico that will be his fault!! Anyways, after all that, i still love him. hahaha. but i think he needs to learn a lesson. But great story and i hope you update soon!!

Plsssssss continue with this. I've followed it from the very start and love it. Made my day when I saw the update!

Well Michael is nearly as bad as his father being a bully, his father uses punches... Sydney is going to resent him big time and will take a long time before she forgives him if ever.

I had tears in my eyes when I got to the end of the chapter! PLEASE UPDATE SOON!

muy buen capitulo, sera sid casarce son el, espero muy pronto nuevos capitulos, ana maria

This is a great story, I'm so glad you decided to do a sequel (it's been a while since I've been on this site). Update soon!