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STop writing author's notes and just write the fucking story, how are we going to know if we like the story if you don't write it, I like your angsty male character... he needs a good plot to wake him up AND GET HIS jUICES RUNNING.... JUST HAVE A DUDE TRY TO SEDUCE HIM.... BRING OUT HIS INNER UKE, AT VERY LEAST HE'LL HAVE SOMETHING TO COMPLAIN ABOUT. Don't just talk about writing, damn-it write, IT! Grumpy, G














































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That is completely sad, you gave up too early so no one had a chance to even get into it. If your expecting praise and loyalty, at least give your readers more than just a tease. I thought the beginning was promising, can't say much because it was just starting to unfold, but damn, I liked the flavor. Saying much more would have be the equivalent of trying to judge Star Wars just by reading the first line: In a galaxy far far away...

Hello I just saw your notice that you might discontinue the story, I have some advice I hope helps. I do not really like stories from the first person POV, especially when it is worded like the character is talking to the reader and an attempt is made at a conversational/humorous feel to it. Most good books are not written in a first person casual tone like that. The plot itself I can't say much about because I haven't really seen it yet and the summary offers very little in telling me what it is going to be about.

I know exactly what you mean. I write stories and have no idea where their going all the time!Great prologue I want to see how much his like really sucks lol. I'll be patient and wait for you update! ~^-^~