rate_review Reviews

Kina wanted to whallop Alice upside the head when she was surprised by Frakie's "paranoia" as far as taking another dose was concerned. Seriously? Little- Urgh. It does drive home the point of how tough it can be for an insider to get out of the druggie loop, though. I hope Frankie can eventually pull herself (or get help pulling her out of) that trap.

As much as the title in itself amuses me, if you're going to make "hot doctor" Frankie's new name for the doctor (as it seems you are), it should be capitalized "Hot Doctor" because it's being used as a name (proper noun) in that case. :) Forgive me for my nitpicking. There are a few other little grammatical errors, but for the most part it's really well written again, and very engaging. I enjoyed myself again.

Happy writing.

~Moonstar

Loved! Can't wait for more

soooo gooood. keep going.

Oh I liked it. Can't wait to read more! ^-^

Very nice. Good descriptive narrative and story flow, and I like the characters already. I like that you're pairing present tense with the first person; I usually find first person irritating, but whenever the narrator at least speaks in present tense, it breaks up the "Once upon a time, blah, blah, blah..." feel and turns it into a more immediate, active reflection of the events going on.

I think your description of the drug scene was particularly vivid, but really, the whole thing was very well written and I enjoyed it. I hope you continue to be inspired and I will try to remember to keep an eye out for it.

~Moonstar

interesting more please.