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October 3, 2012 at 12:00 AM
The story could be beautiful and painful - in a good way, but the rushed sex scene where the girl is unbelievably quickly *all hot and ready* for her "guardian angel" to take her, spoilt it all for me. Where has all her broken-heart-ed-ness gone??? She has never noticed the guy before - and look, now she needs her more than anything.. wow. And the guy is way too ready to change and leave everything behind for his love - how come?
Yep, miracles do happen. But you need more time, may be. Or chapters, or else...
I'd rather read and know a bit more about "angels" and their relatonship with their "clients" , btw, I didn't like the word... it's not some kind of business or service, isn't it?
The poem \ lyrics was beautiful. Could these snowflakes be connected metaphorically with something else? Snow, the sky, the heaven, may be?
Good luck with your writing.
Yep, miracles do happen. But you need more time, may be. Or chapters, or else...
I'd rather read and know a bit more about "angels" and their relatonship with their "clients" , btw, I didn't like the word... it's not some kind of business or service, isn't it?
The poem \ lyrics was beautiful. Could these snowflakes be connected metaphorically with something else? Snow, the sky, the heaven, may be?
Good luck with your writing.