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October 26, 2011 at 12:00 AM
The thing with the poetry-like interspersions was a little weird to me at first -I think I tried reading this once before and that was what put me off- but I'm getting used to them. Some of them are quite amusing.
A few notes:
-There's a difference between "defiantly" and "definitely". An important one.
-It's "for all intents and purposes", meaning this is true in every important respect.
-Something takes "precedence" over something else, not president.
If you are doing it on purpose, feel free to ignore this, but it seems weird in the context of the story.
(sorry, had to re-post because precendent and precedence are not the same.)
A few notes:
-There's a difference between "defiantly" and "definitely". An important one.
-It's "for all intents and purposes", meaning this is true in every important respect.
-Something takes "precedence" over something else, not president.
If you are doing it on purpose, feel free to ignore this, but it seems weird in the context of the story.
(sorry, had to re-post because precendent and precedence are not the same.)
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October 5, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Damn... you tease! G
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October 4, 2011 at 12:00 AM
The unusual lay out and writing style is immediately eye catching and grips you. You want to read more, need to find out where this is going. An original storyline so far an enjoyable read.
Winter X
Winter X
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September 27, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Your story is no longer a virgin, for I have just reviewing it. It definitely a New and different tale, and I want more. So did the poor Kid die at the end!
Well lets infuse a little reality here for a change! Do you know that Aleister Crowley, a real Wizard of the Dark side... all so know as the Great Beast 666, He wrote "Magick in Theory and Practice" Suggested in his writings Weegee Boards were wildly dangerous for amatuers and non-adepts could actually call up someting really nasty, that so-called boards were portals for hell spawn spirits to come through and manipulate the living and so big bad wizard fearfully advised that people shouldn't use them.
LOL, G
Well lets infuse a little reality here for a change! Do you know that Aleister Crowley, a real Wizard of the Dark side... all so know as the Great Beast 666, He wrote "Magick in Theory and Practice" Suggested in his writings Weegee Boards were wildly dangerous for amatuers and non-adepts could actually call up someting really nasty, that so-called boards were portals for hell spawn spirits to come through and manipulate the living and so big bad wizard fearfully advised that people shouldn't use them.
LOL, G