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March 23, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Thank you thank you thank you.
Of course Ryo has PTSD. He couldn't return to normal. Thank god. His panic makes him so real to me.
Now excuse me. I must get back to reading.
I swear this must be worse than crack. :P
Of course Ryo has PTSD. He couldn't return to normal. Thank god. His panic makes him so real to me.
Now excuse me. I must get back to reading.
I swear this must be worse than crack. :P
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March 23, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Blainn is so real to me. He reminds me of someone I know. I really enjoy him as a character in so many ways.
Um.. And I guess it's good for Ryo to understand what is going on in his fucked up head, but I doubt he is going to do much about it.
I wonder if Brennan is even vaguely interested. Hope he isn't. (not.)
Um.. And I guess it's good for Ryo to understand what is going on in his fucked up head, but I doubt he is going to do much about it.
I wonder if Brennan is even vaguely interested. Hope he isn't. (not.)
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March 23, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Lovely to see an update, but sorry to read that your time away may not have been under ideal circumstances.
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Once again, quality writing at its best!
Having removed the tangible boundary (the locked room), the intangible (psychological) boundary still persists, and though Ryo has emerged a little stronger (no real need to take the pills) he is still confused about why his feelings are still influenced by Brennan.
This will continue to be a problem as long as Brennan has access to him; his trauma (syndrome) will therefore not see an end. More concisely, the scenery has changed but Brennan is still in control and Ryo is still his captive. Unless he removes himself from Brennan’s 'world', he would always be tied to him and will not see his way out – That is….if he truly wants to (but at this moment he is so confused his thoughts are still influenced).
Such complex intuitive and organic thinking when it comes to writing Ryo’s inner instability, with so much for the reader to think about, this story still remains to be nothing less than wonderfully absorbing.
FM
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Once again, quality writing at its best!
Having removed the tangible boundary (the locked room), the intangible (psychological) boundary still persists, and though Ryo has emerged a little stronger (no real need to take the pills) he is still confused about why his feelings are still influenced by Brennan.
This will continue to be a problem as long as Brennan has access to him; his trauma (syndrome) will therefore not see an end. More concisely, the scenery has changed but Brennan is still in control and Ryo is still his captive. Unless he removes himself from Brennan’s 'world', he would always be tied to him and will not see his way out – That is….if he truly wants to (but at this moment he is so confused his thoughts are still influenced).
Such complex intuitive and organic thinking when it comes to writing Ryo’s inner instability, with so much for the reader to think about, this story still remains to be nothing less than wonderfully absorbing.
FM
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March 23, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I am up to speed. Caught up. And I read several chapters without a review. Are you proud? I feel like such a spamming troll. I've never left so many reviews for ANYTHING in one day. You're probably sick of me. Or amused. I'm amused. Haha.
Brennan. Oh. Hmm.
I knew Ryo wasn't going to get over him. Brennan shows up and it is quite obvious that the redhead's world goes from some crap 128-bit to HD in less than a heartbeat. It had been several months and the mob guy still makes his heart throb, and it's totally bad that I can justify it now that the scenery has changed.
Speaking of which, Brennan can justify anything, obviously, and the fact that he doesn't think he did anything wrong irks me. It should eat at me. If everything was normal, consenting, and not screwed up, it would be like eating shredded wheat when you were used to lucky charms. Those messed up and bizarre tasting marshmallows make a world of difference. Alas, I'm in love with this story. I fear it's coming to an end. It's already looming over my head, but I can deal.
Cannot wait for more. Thanks for posting this little gem.
Brennan. Oh. Hmm.
I knew Ryo wasn't going to get over him. Brennan shows up and it is quite obvious that the redhead's world goes from some crap 128-bit to HD in less than a heartbeat. It had been several months and the mob guy still makes his heart throb, and it's totally bad that I can justify it now that the scenery has changed.
Speaking of which, Brennan can justify anything, obviously, and the fact that he doesn't think he did anything wrong irks me. It should eat at me. If everything was normal, consenting, and not screwed up, it would be like eating shredded wheat when you were used to lucky charms. Those messed up and bizarre tasting marshmallows make a world of difference. Alas, I'm in love with this story. I fear it's coming to an end. It's already looming over my head, but I can deal.
Cannot wait for more. Thanks for posting this little gem.
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March 22, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I was going to read the whole story before I reviewed; I PROMISED myself. Then I read this:
"What was worse than dying a gruesome, messy death? Doing so while your pants were falling down."
Oh gosh. I was laughing my tail off. BTW your English is PERFECT... I think I have told you this before. I love stockholm fics but they are never done right, with the exception of one that came out recently. This one shows promise and peaks my interest, and from the look of your reviews, I'll be one happy camper. Why didn't you or someone tell me to read it earlier?
BTW I miss seeing you around here. :)
"What was worse than dying a gruesome, messy death? Doing so while your pants were falling down."
Oh gosh. I was laughing my tail off. BTW your English is PERFECT... I think I have told you this before. I love stockholm fics but they are never done right, with the exception of one that came out recently. This one shows promise and peaks my interest, and from the look of your reviews, I'll be one happy camper. Why didn't you or someone tell me to read it earlier?
BTW I miss seeing you around here. :)
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March 22, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I love how primal Ryo's thoughts are. I never really realize how many of those impulsive one-word thoughts I have but I go through tons of them all the time. Genius!
Also, I really love your descriptions. The lines like "He followed the man back towards sleep." just completely spell out just how his panicked mind is turning to jelly.
I have never heard of the word "burgle." Thinking of it makes me laugh. I imagine someone being tackled by dogs to the point of them rolling down a hill. Excuse my weirdness. It is indeed a real word!
Brennan's character amuses me. The way he delivers things and is making Ryo so fearful is witty and powerful, so much that I found my heart pounding, and oh, fuck! What a sick bastard poking his "business" at the kid already!
Blain makes me wonder if he had to deal with the same crap from. Brennan at one point, just because he is so sympathetic towards Ryo.
Who are these guys? The mob? Grrrr I want to find out and I don't like waiting to find out later! This story is awesome! I'm totally stoked.
Also, I really love your descriptions. The lines like "He followed the man back towards sleep." just completely spell out just how his panicked mind is turning to jelly.
I have never heard of the word "burgle." Thinking of it makes me laugh. I imagine someone being tackled by dogs to the point of them rolling down a hill. Excuse my weirdness. It is indeed a real word!
Brennan's character amuses me. The way he delivers things and is making Ryo so fearful is witty and powerful, so much that I found my heart pounding, and oh, fuck! What a sick bastard poking his "business" at the kid already!
Blain makes me wonder if he had to deal with the same crap from. Brennan at one point, just because he is so sympathetic towards Ryo.
Who are these guys? The mob? Grrrr I want to find out and I don't like waiting to find out later! This story is awesome! I'm totally stoked.
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March 22, 2012 at 12:00 AM
DEADDEADEADEADEADEADDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD
wow. i feel like ive got whiplash or something! UNF! that was soooo goood!
joy!
ahahaha, and im totally laughing cause you responded to my question! lol. it cant be as simple as he wants ryo cause of the noises he makes is it??? can it really be that simple? or is it more? more!
wow. i feel like ive got whiplash or something! UNF! that was soooo goood!
joy!
ahahaha, and im totally laughing cause you responded to my question! lol. it cant be as simple as he wants ryo cause of the noises he makes is it??? can it really be that simple? or is it more? more!
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March 22, 2012 at 12:00 AM
you is all like, 'dont rush me!' lol. take your time but know that i demand more!
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March 22, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Ugh. I've barely met the guy and I can already tell that is SO like Brennan to skip any formalities and go straight to the gun. He is so well written, and I like him, in the way that it isn't often that I meet a character that I hate so much that it makes me want to throw the story across the room since... Harry Potter? I think it was Umbridge? HATED her!
Brennan makes my heart pound. I feel like I'm helpless Ryo, who's already given in to the fact that he's stuck here and isn't putting up a fight. I'm at odds because I wish he would but I'm glad he's not. I'd rather see him with a bruised neck than with... I don't know? A broken arm and a couple broken ribs to match?
Brennan is sooo terrifying and sick. The way he gets Ryo so frightened and unable to breath and then the way you describe him shamelessly nuzzling the kid's neck was so vivid. Then he does it not once, but twice. I'm scared that Ryo is going to like those "peaceful" moments between whatever this tyrant is going to do.
Then Ryo starts to -for a brief hint of a moment- admire him when he starts to think that look suits Brennan. Now I KNOW he will grow to like this! Noooo!
In the beginning of this chapter(3), when you mentioned it took him a long time to go to sleep and left it at that, it was perfect. I could just imagine that poor guy wide-eyed and unable to hear anything but his heartbeat.
I'm glad that Blain casually reminded Ryo who's side he is really on, because even if he is a nice guy, he's still not on Ryo's side. At the same time, he sounds like he is looking out for Ryo by hinting that things will go a lot smoother if he just submits to his fate and deals with it.
There is so much depth and personality in these characters; I feel like I'm watching them on film. Seriously, this is stunning work! Beautifully written. The delivery style is amazing, and something I've always poorly tried to go for, and I've always failed at it. I'm envious and can't wait to devour the next chapter.
Brennan makes my heart pound. I feel like I'm helpless Ryo, who's already given in to the fact that he's stuck here and isn't putting up a fight. I'm at odds because I wish he would but I'm glad he's not. I'd rather see him with a bruised neck than with... I don't know? A broken arm and a couple broken ribs to match?
Brennan is sooo terrifying and sick. The way he gets Ryo so frightened and unable to breath and then the way you describe him shamelessly nuzzling the kid's neck was so vivid. Then he does it not once, but twice. I'm scared that Ryo is going to like those "peaceful" moments between whatever this tyrant is going to do.
Then Ryo starts to -for a brief hint of a moment- admire him when he starts to think that look suits Brennan. Now I KNOW he will grow to like this! Noooo!
In the beginning of this chapter(3), when you mentioned it took him a long time to go to sleep and left it at that, it was perfect. I could just imagine that poor guy wide-eyed and unable to hear anything but his heartbeat.
I'm glad that Blain casually reminded Ryo who's side he is really on, because even if he is a nice guy, he's still not on Ryo's side. At the same time, he sounds like he is looking out for Ryo by hinting that things will go a lot smoother if he just submits to his fate and deals with it.
There is so much depth and personality in these characters; I feel like I'm watching them on film. Seriously, this is stunning work! Beautifully written. The delivery style is amazing, and something I've always poorly tried to go for, and I've always failed at it. I'm envious and can't wait to devour the next chapter.
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March 22, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Wow. I don't know if it was the coffee or Brennan, but my heart is pounding and I'm nervously pacing around the room. Thank god I'm reading this on a phone otherwise we would have problems.
I love Blain. You can tell he's different because there is a sense of naivety to him and there was from the start. I do have a bone to pick though. In the first couple of chapters, he doesn't speak in that sloppy dialogue. At all, or maybe he doesn't do it much. Did you mean to do it that way? Like he knows when he's supposed to act "prim and proper" or was it something that was decided upon later? It's a totally minor inconsistency and I still love the story a lot! I actually like Blain more now that he speaks that way.
"The thin electronic music coming from the opposite end, annoying at the best of times, was insultingly cheerful."
"Someone was talking to him, but it didn't really register until that someone tried to haul him upright. Who was pulling on him and why? He blinked. Oh, Blainn. Whatever. The guy could wait. He was busy dying."
I love your small injections of humor. They keep a lighter mood to the story. It makes things easier to digest.
Is Phillip coming back? That last tidbit of dialogue leaves me hopeful. I don't even know who Phillip is but I like him.
Ugh. I was going to write something else but my head is spinning. I want to read more. Brennan likes Ryo squirming. I guess that's keeping him alive. He didn't really have a heart attack did he? It was like anxiety or panic right? I hope? Oh. Lordy!
I love Blain. You can tell he's different because there is a sense of naivety to him and there was from the start. I do have a bone to pick though. In the first couple of chapters, he doesn't speak in that sloppy dialogue. At all, or maybe he doesn't do it much. Did you mean to do it that way? Like he knows when he's supposed to act "prim and proper" or was it something that was decided upon later? It's a totally minor inconsistency and I still love the story a lot! I actually like Blain more now that he speaks that way.
"The thin electronic music coming from the opposite end, annoying at the best of times, was insultingly cheerful."
"Someone was talking to him, but it didn't really register until that someone tried to haul him upright. Who was pulling on him and why? He blinked. Oh, Blainn. Whatever. The guy could wait. He was busy dying."
I love your small injections of humor. They keep a lighter mood to the story. It makes things easier to digest.
Is Phillip coming back? That last tidbit of dialogue leaves me hopeful. I don't even know who Phillip is but I like him.
Ugh. I was going to write something else but my head is spinning. I want to read more. Brennan likes Ryo squirming. I guess that's keeping him alive. He didn't really have a heart attack did he? It was like anxiety or panic right? I hope? Oh. Lordy!