rate_review Reviews

This story definitely has a good plot & outline, but the shift in personalities & the uncharacteristic changes in reaction, + the lack of definition or detail is all confusing, and makes the entire thing seem like a fevered dream with no true sense. Plz think on this & address these notes.

Rukia

oh my god that was hilarious and awesome! that was perfect mpreg yaoi!
I really enjoyed this story and i am off to read any and everything else you have written

aww the ending was so sweet eve though ken is a douche:) ncan u mayb do an epilogue or something? like Itsuki finally saying he loves ken or something

Yup, this couple's road to love/hate is very much like half of your fic couples which is violent, domineering, and twisted. Of course, I love them all for their quirks. For this couple I love that Itsuki held out for as long as he did and still does. The line “Your father is my prisoner and I don't intend to let him go,” and "Tomorrow I'll love you," made me chuckled. I was happy to see that Itsuki is enjoying and participating Ken's possessive love.

I would love to see another short fic of them if and when you are inspired.

Your fan,
renee

P.S. Always awaiting for your update.

What a bittersweet tale. Too little too late from Ken. I am a little sorry for Ken because he genuinely loves Itsuki, but he never gave Itsuki the chance to love him back. Maybe he could have easily won Itsuki's heart if he had treated him well. Instead Itsuki love/hates him and Ken is stuck hovering around desperate for a word of love from Itsuki. I don't know if Itsuki will ever be able to forgive him for treating him so badly and for keeping him away from his mother and Haruka. It is sad that they have been unhappy for so many years, and I feel like the only way Itsuki will ever appreciate Ken is if he should die or have his life threatened. I hope you will give them a way to work things out.