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"You're just this tender, docile little creature that I want to dig My claws into and *crush* sometimes. Make of it what you like." That made me laugh so hard. I don't know why. Good show, my Queen, good show.

Hell, this whole chapter was funny in a macabre sort of way. Keep up the good work!

Wow, I'm just in awe of this chapter, which is a good thing. Just wow, Phi is one tough little cookie I commend her for that, and this only makes me hate Reginald even more, technically it was his fault. That is a good safe word, wonder when Will Phi use it.

Good job.

Ah, my love and my life. It has been too long since last I wrote. I bid you to tell the Magnificent White Queen that I enjoy word of her exploits so much so that I nearly got myself in trouble with my handlers for staying up as late as I did. My dearest wishes go out to you towards the continuation and I hope that, if the White Queen may not find me too bold in saying, Phi may eventually find peace and love where she does look for it.

I wish to hear from you soon, as I am anxious to see more exploits (and I am facinated by the mind that is the Queen.)

Ever your faithful servant.
Saige

I'll discribe Sidja first, then review this chapter. By the way, yes, Sidja compels me to do many things just for a chance to be graced by her "presence". I can't draw very well so I'll try to explain it with words. I imagined her as someone more wild looking. Not the full on torn clothes and mussed up hair, but long flowing hair and a more playful face, one that could lull a person into believing that this woman, this Queen, could be rather harmless. Yet it is obvious that she commands such incredible power that if she so desired, she could comb over an landmass with her armies and rule it all. I also imagined her clothes would be more white, quite like the pure white snow that covers the land at this point in the story. I also imagined a glow to her, but that aspect is truly just from my point of view, giving her a glow of importance and well, attractiveness. That's the best I can do right now.

Onto the review... GAH! I am furious with Sidja and the fact that She allowed Herself to get lost in the moment and hurt Phi so badly. I do accept though that She feels bad about what She did, so I won't go holding it over Her head. I'm too smart to never think this won't happen again though, because that is just Sidja and Her way. But in all honesty, I see the confliction now. Her heart is torn between having Phi as a simple little servant that She can push around and as someone She can love or does love. Maybe I'm seeing something that isn't there, but alas.

Not much else to add. Phi's sense of humor is golden really. If only she wasn't the literal whipping "boy"*meaning girl but sticking with the original phrase* for Sidja, then more of her true self would come out I think. She did submit to Sidja's desires today, but at a heavy cost to her skin and her wrists. I wonder what Sidja will do to make up for the damage she caused, as the end of the chapter seems to hint at that.

Oh I feel something will happen to Phi for the letting the nickname slip. I stopped reading when I read that line and though, "Oh shit oh shit," and Reginald by the way annoys the shit out of me. I wanna fucking choke him.

Don't let one review dictate everything, I did that once and I strayed from my outline. Take it, consider it and weight it, but don't let it completely change everything.

Good work, hope the momentum keeps going strong!

Dear, you shouldn`t even care about my opinion. You`ve misunderstood my intentions. The tale is splendid to a point of inflating the hearts of your readers and inducing reviews from them. Pay no attention to that, especially to me "lol". The way you portray the characters is "addictive" Which I so very much enjoy. Yet the Queen, I love yet hate yet I love, is just too deep and whenever I see something this complex (yes your characters are that interesting, at least to me) I just go at it. I´m like a dog chasing a car, if I caught one, I simply do not know what I would do with it, besides running after it.

Don`t let other`s influence sweat over your work, because I know very much that feeling. And if it serves for consolation, I may just have a little twinge of "likey" coming from her royal highness. But she`s so intimidating and good looking that I would panic.


Now to my curius perception comes my questions about what circle does the Queen enjoy? Forbbiden books? Literature and drawings from the ancient antediluvian eras? I can almost imagine her sitting, in her private gardens while reading a poem of Sappho herself. Or maybe attempting to imagine how such primitive cultures had such tremendous knowledge over the stars and about "gods and goddesses" origin myths of humanity. Or,taunting Phi about the concept of an harem.

Oh just wonderful. Phi learning sword play was actually something I was waiting to see, but it was quickly overthrown by the arrival of the Karma Sutra. Phi's reaction to the book was BRILLANT and The Queen ever in her same playful yet serious mood was hardly bothered by Phi and the reaction she gave. The only unpleasant part of the story was the appearance of Lord Averring once more, waltzing about the castle like he owned it. While I do believe that he sees nothing wrong in doing so and truly is actions are harmless for the most part, it is still quite a bother, still quite a smudge on a beautiful painting, whenever he shows up. His constant poking into the life of Phi and Her Majesty... honestly I wouldn't be all too surprised if at some point, Phi herself killed him, on grounds of self defense. Though how that would be perceived by the other nobles and such makes me hope that Phi never gets that angry with him.

Onto more, with the new mysterious yet incredibly interesting Baron of Green and the, dare I say, social group known only as the Circle. It is nice to now know where Her Majesty gets several of the interesting things that she has in her possession, such as the Glass Dagger and those silver clothespins I think I remember seeing. The book will provide a fair sort of fun for later chapters no doubt, but I wonder who is intended to wear the dagger. Quick answer makes me think it's going to be Her Majesty, but a curious imagination makes me wonder if maybe She will surprise Phi by letting Phi take the dominant role with the dagger. I'll just have to wait and see I guess.

I had a look at the story art and I must say the image of the Queen surprised me a little. She wasn't exactly as I had imagined, but she wasn't so different looking that she stopped being an appealing and beautiful character in my mind, much less a person, if I so dare imagine the Queen to be real. But your question after you responded to that review from last chapter... I beg forgiveness for use of her name but I feel there is no other way for me to properly say what I wish to say. Queen Isadj to me is a dangerous person. But everyone is dangerous, all in their own special little ways. Her Majesty is someone who has a very tight grip on Her life and how it is supposed to be run, like she has it all writen out somewhere. She could very well be a person who takes each day in stride and I applaud her for such a thoughtful approach to life, yet it truly does seem like she has everything planned for. She is not at all obsessed with the thrill of the hunt, for if she were then she wouldn't care about any of Phis feelings. To think that Teixeira call Her Majesty a monster annoys even me, for nothing about Her Majesty adds up to that of a monster, which crushes near everything in it's path regardless if it is friend or foe.

I do dare say that I love the Queen, because there is a haunting beauty aspect to her, because she is so powerful that it nearly forces me to bow in her presence. It's not an awful or mean power, but simply the power of a good ruler, something that someone would respect or come to respect after being with Her for some time. Love aside, I would count Her Majesty as among one of my friends, one I would look up to and hopefully be able to receive help from at some point, because She seems to know so much, like a wise mother. She will always be wonderful to me, unless she somehow kills Phi.

By the way, Teixeira. I am in no way trying to attack you or your review. I'm just stating my opinion and mean no ill will towards you. Cheers.

This Averring fellow... he gets on my nerves. When does he get what's coming to him?

I absolutely love this story.

Forgive my delay, but life has so little moments where one has its own time for quietude. Well, on to my review then.

Oh, and I "melted" when I saw the fanart.

I`m mostly a fan of Phi, regardless of the Queen´s intents, I can fully understand the lack of support and hope that nurtured someone such as Phi during her most crucial years. Her mind is wrecked, of course one could say lovely things to her but Phi knows, and I know just as well, how ill-mannered people trick the lowest of the low with a crumble of hope in order to do the most despicable of things. I would love to say that, she indeed loves Phi and it´s not just about the thrill of "ownership" but that would be a lie, a lie to my own self and to Phi whom so graciously had the honesty to ensure that Sidja knew, just how her intents were being "filtered" by someone whom experienced the lies of others.

I don`t know why you do this, especially to me. The feelings I harness are of utter despair upon the realization of Phi`s imprisonement, let us be realistic, would she let Phi go...simply because Phi wanted to? No, she would not let Phi go and that is why I sense Phi´s actions being so natural.

However, can death really grant Phi freedom? She never had the opportunity to begin with and there will always be a clash among these two because Sidja has become addicted to the taste "breaking things", which I find revolting. Phi loves her, she loves Sidja with the bottom of her heart. Still, it is the Queen whom desires Phi and not Sidja. That is the tragedy of it all, similar to care free Pershephone and the infernal Hades for there are no lies among each other regarding their feelings for one another.

Once again, I accuse the Queen of malice and ill-mannered intents. The woman is literally obssessed with thrill of the hunt!! (I love the character but I could not love such a person in real life.) I know what Phi felt, the sense of twisting around the stomach. The cold shivering, even though quiet as a rock, the excruciating pain, as if a thousand needles being pierced through the skull along with an overflow of thoughts. Her inability to whisper her word, nails digging deep...Where was I again? Ah, yes. Sidja is such a monster, so manipulative...And it just frightens me to know she´s proud of what she is, what she does, how she behaves and the thrill she has, of being able to expose true "carnivorous" self. Phi, is just the chain that has been keeping her tamed and god have mercy if jealousy ever drops into her blackened heart. The girl is like a jewel to her, watch but not touch.


She´s the Hyde of us I say! Also because she terrorizes me and yet, why do I awe her? why do I AWE her?