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October 19, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I leave and come back to see this, all these chapters and the end. I'm baffled and a huge mixture of feelings. I love it yet I feel you could dragged this out much more. Don't get me wrong I must clarify what ever you chose to write and how to write it is great. As an avid reader and providing good criticism job well done as a crazy squealing maniac fan I'm just sad to see it end hence I mention you could kept it going adding another twist here and there and dragging out 'Reginald' demise. Anyways I hope you continue to write and share with us your work and good luck with the publishing. I bid the Queen farewell, and to you my fair lady I must bow at your excellent work.
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October 19, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I was going to write a review for at least two weeks but was to lazy. I thought that I had a lot of time before the story would be finished, but turns out that I was wrong. So I'm writing my review now. The story is just brilliant; it's fantastic. I think that this is the first high-quality femm slash that I've ever read. It's actually better than most of published slash romance books I've read! I love the plot and the heroines. I also appreiciate the speed of publishing - there was never a long waiting for the new chapter. I hope that you will write something more about Phi and her Queen :-).
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October 19, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Oh ho!! So it's not over. Sidja is quite a crafty soul, pushing you to write more and more of Her incredible tales. This is a short chapter, but I think if it was longer than it would seem like there was just too much being detailed, overstuffed chapter. Also, thank you for the kind words in the reviews review. I'm glad to be some kind of support, specially to such a good writer.
It seems like Sidja might keep cracking the whip, not literally though, and making you write Adelphus. So I'll keep looking for new chapter like I used to and looking forward to what else might happen. By the way, two things. 1. IT'S OVER 9000!!! XD. 2. If you are going to continue, it might be better to make the next couple of chapters into a sequal, break it off into an all new thing perhaps. It seems that now that Sidja is aware of Her own emotions towards Phi, She's going to be terribly jealous and perhaps over-protective of Phi when any woman lays her hands on Phi. So perhaps the new focus will be Sidja terrified that Her fathers "curse" will still end up preventing Her from being in love with Phi and someone will come along and try to steal Phi from Sidja.
Just an idea.
It seems like Sidja might keep cracking the whip, not literally though, and making you write Adelphus. So I'll keep looking for new chapter like I used to and looking forward to what else might happen. By the way, two things. 1. IT'S OVER 9000!!! XD. 2. If you are going to continue, it might be better to make the next couple of chapters into a sequal, break it off into an all new thing perhaps. It seems that now that Sidja is aware of Her own emotions towards Phi, She's going to be terribly jealous and perhaps over-protective of Phi when any woman lays her hands on Phi. So perhaps the new focus will be Sidja terrified that Her fathers "curse" will still end up preventing Her from being in love with Phi and someone will come along and try to steal Phi from Sidja.
Just an idea.
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October 18, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Genuinely loved this story, from start to finish. Brilliant work!
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October 17, 2011 at 12:00 AM
So the story is really over then?
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October 16, 2011 at 12:00 AM
YES.
YES YES YES YES YES.
Im giddy over just how much I love the last two chapters. Positively over the moon. I was worried, but anxiety lessened as I saw you put down that Queensbride fits the Power of Love trope. Tipped me off there.
Well. You definitely took me along on an amazing ride. The writing in itself is marvelous, the plot and characters amazing... Just... Gah. I really do want to do Queensbride fiction now, but I Dont think I could do Sidja and Phi justice.
Speaking of justice, Averring's end... Wonderful. Sounds cruel, but it honestly is wonderful. Bastard deserved to be castrated. I also liked the little reveal, with Phi disguised, leading to his humiliation and death sentence. Im also quite happy with him getting slapped in the face, it's time he was reprimanded for not showing proper respect to the Queen.
And now we know why the story is called Queensbride. I thought it was going to be metaphorical, but now to see that Phi will actually marry her Queen... See my above YES-ses.
Dhsudjsgeah. All in all, amazing job. Definitely Dont leave us yettt, theres so much more I want to see- reactions of the court, a possible marriage ceremony, the aftermath... coughphiandtheQueengettingitonafterconfessingtheirlovecough... Just so much more I would absolutely love to see from you.
And as for publishing, when, not if, When it gets published, I swear I would by two copies. Just because thats how much I love it.
YES YES YES YES YES.
Im giddy over just how much I love the last two chapters. Positively over the moon. I was worried, but anxiety lessened as I saw you put down that Queensbride fits the Power of Love trope. Tipped me off there.
Well. You definitely took me along on an amazing ride. The writing in itself is marvelous, the plot and characters amazing... Just... Gah. I really do want to do Queensbride fiction now, but I Dont think I could do Sidja and Phi justice.
Speaking of justice, Averring's end... Wonderful. Sounds cruel, but it honestly is wonderful. Bastard deserved to be castrated. I also liked the little reveal, with Phi disguised, leading to his humiliation and death sentence. Im also quite happy with him getting slapped in the face, it's time he was reprimanded for not showing proper respect to the Queen.
And now we know why the story is called Queensbride. I thought it was going to be metaphorical, but now to see that Phi will actually marry her Queen... See my above YES-ses.
Dhsudjsgeah. All in all, amazing job. Definitely Dont leave us yettt, theres so much more I want to see- reactions of the court, a possible marriage ceremony, the aftermath... coughphiandtheQueengettingitonafterconfessingtheirlovecough... Just so much more I would absolutely love to see from you.
And as for publishing, when, not if, When it gets published, I swear I would by two copies. Just because thats how much I love it.
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October 16, 2011 at 12:00 AM
WOOOO HOOOOO!!!! As sad as I am that the story has come to an end, it has come to the best possible end that it could reach. I am so happy to see that Sidja has finally admitted Her feelings, that Phi was finally able to speak her heart, that Averring is going to be six feet under and that the all appears well in the world. The chapter before the final was lovely and a little scary, but I knew Sidja would never let Phi jump and never let her die.
You are such a wonderful writer Adelphus and I know somehow, you're gonna get this published. But it will take a little while, depending on what projects you undertake. I look forward to seeing more of your work and applaud you for writing such a wonderful story with such a wonderful ending. Bravo good sir/madam, bravo!
You are such a wonderful writer Adelphus and I know somehow, you're gonna get this published. But it will take a little while, depending on what projects you undertake. I look forward to seeing more of your work and applaud you for writing such a wonderful story with such a wonderful ending. Bravo good sir/madam, bravo!
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October 16, 2011 at 12:00 AM
To Adelphus - Words fail me at how utterly enthralled I have been by your masterfully woven tale of Phi and Sidja. It was such a touching, heartfelt story of pain and trauma, of renewal and rebirth, and of the indomitable power of the human spirit. Phi was absolutely amazing, so small and fragile, yet at the same time more powerful and empowered. Sidja was cruel and dark, yet caring and hurt. Layer upon layer made up these two powerful yet utterly contrasted characters; two women who have both suffered much and who together managed to heal the wounds of their past that each on their own were incapable of overcoming. This is the first time that I have ever written a review of fan-fiction, here or anywhere else, but I have been so utterly touched and moved by this story that I feel that anything less of an honest review would be a crime not only against you as an author, but against Phi and Sidja as the wonderfully written characters that they are. I have been reading with great interest from the publishing of the very first chapter here on AdultFanfiction.net, and it is with great shame that I must admit to having not given you the praise that you and your stars so deserved all along. I shall be eagerly awaiting any future tales you might have, especially those concerning the queens Phi and Sidja, and should your writings ever be published I shall make sure to add them to my library.
To Sidja - Sidja, you truly are an amazing woman and a queen with much potential. It fills me with joy to see you finally achieve that which you have so rightfully deserved for so long. No matter how you might see yourself, and no matter what others may say, always know that your wonderful Phi is entirely correct in that you are in no way an evil or horrid person. Know that were I a citizen of your kingdom that I would gladly lay my life and my sword on the line for the great queens of the north. It would be nothing less than an honor to serve so great and progressive a queen as you Sidja, for what you and Phi have is truly worth fighting for. May the fates smile upon you and your love for all eternity.
To Phi - Phi, you are a testament to the unbreakable will and indomitable spirit of humanity; to have come from such pain and suffering, such trepidation and abuse from the world around you, and to emerge proud, strong, and unafraid to express your true self is truly remarkable. Know always that you are not merely valuable, but are in fact priceless; there is only one miracle known as Phi, and there shall never be another such as you. Know that it was you who brought the great White Queen orfthe North such joy, and that it was you who has freed her from her painful past and opened wide the doors of your combined futures. Your courage and bravery are as great as any warrior's, and your compassion as limitless as the widest ocean. You shall truly make a great queen Phi, and just as I would gladly kneel before your majestic and powerful Sidja, so to will I kneel before the spirited, unbreakable little queen who stands by her side.
To Sidja - Sidja, you truly are an amazing woman and a queen with much potential. It fills me with joy to see you finally achieve that which you have so rightfully deserved for so long. No matter how you might see yourself, and no matter what others may say, always know that your wonderful Phi is entirely correct in that you are in no way an evil or horrid person. Know that were I a citizen of your kingdom that I would gladly lay my life and my sword on the line for the great queens of the north. It would be nothing less than an honor to serve so great and progressive a queen as you Sidja, for what you and Phi have is truly worth fighting for. May the fates smile upon you and your love for all eternity.
To Phi - Phi, you are a testament to the unbreakable will and indomitable spirit of humanity; to have come from such pain and suffering, such trepidation and abuse from the world around you, and to emerge proud, strong, and unafraid to express your true self is truly remarkable. Know always that you are not merely valuable, but are in fact priceless; there is only one miracle known as Phi, and there shall never be another such as you. Know that it was you who brought the great White Queen orfthe North such joy, and that it was you who has freed her from her painful past and opened wide the doors of your combined futures. Your courage and bravery are as great as any warrior's, and your compassion as limitless as the widest ocean. You shall truly make a great queen Phi, and just as I would gladly kneel before your majestic and powerful Sidja, so to will I kneel before the spirited, unbreakable little queen who stands by her side.
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October 16, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Naw!! That was so beautiful. Thank you so much for sharing this with us all. And for castrating Averring.
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October 16, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I really cant figure out why i love this story so much but ive been reading a couple of chapters a night and thinking about it alot during the day and now i am caught up. Phi cant die come one preferably the Queen needs to come find her, it seems the Queen would want to know why Phi is taking so long on the tea anyways. Also im sure the Queen has a much more interesting way to kill averring then how Phi just about did. love your writing love your characters new chapter please.