rate_review Reviews

Oh i am most deffinitly enjoying the story, especially with these updates. they are the highlight of my nights :3

And i know what you mean about him having issues. I am writing my own story like this and I don't know if it's just the whole 1st person thing, but he also has issues of his own and loves to voice them. Very sarcastic haha.

Anyways i loved this chapter especially where it is going. Someone should get Jess a glass of water... or a bucket. ;3 And i loved how relatable the sibling drama was, seriously reminds me of my sister and myself. I am oober protective of her, I made a boy friend cry once haha.

=) I'm really enjoying this story so far. I hope you keep up the good work!

Also I think I found a spelling mistake if you want to correct it

"we need to get you some nice staff for the shot!"

I'm assuming it's meant to say "stuff"

Hahaha, now Jess has to endure a whole afternoon watching his sister ham it up for the camera! With a shirtless Sam! lol

Great chapter; so awkward, hahah, seeing that "freshly fucked" guy stumble out of the apt., so funny! :)

I did notice an error though, common; I think you meant to write come on or c'mon (the slang version)

Anyway....yeah, don't worry about the punctuation; I just thought I'd point it out.

Can't wait for more! :)

Mmmm... it was adorable. A light, fun read with witty dialogues and engaging characters. I especially enjoyed the mantra "so awkward"...
Further interactions between Jess and Sam should be a real feast;)

Good dialogue for the first time and funny too. I look forward to reading more. G

Ha, what a great chapter! They're both hot for each other! Of course Sam has an excuse, but Jess, no way! lol

Can't wait to see where this goes! Awesome job!

Oh, one little critique: you don't like punctuation, do you? lol You keep forgetting the periods and commas after the dialogue. For example "Hey there Anna," Sam said. Or you could have a period after Anna. But you need some sort of punctuation there.

Other than that! Two thumbs up! :)

Curse you and your cliff hangers! Though i must say i am fond of them myself though I dont think i like being on the recieving end hahah.

anyways i love the comedy of your story so much, i am seriously laughing at ever other word. And i love how awkward it got between Sam and Jessy. It was kind of cute how he seemed reluctant to 'forget' the kiss but he never did promise no to look. May the gods bless him ;3

I cannot wait to see what happens next especially since Jessy seems to be developing some... issues. That and I want to see how it goes with his visitor. Sisters can be difficult, especially when your the protective one. I feel for the boy.

I like very much, the characters seem well drawn, and the plot is engaging. I can't wait to see how things go after that kiss.

Omg, do I like?? Fuck yeah; this is hysterical! I was cracking up! They're both checking each other out, but Jess doesn't even KNOW he's checking Sam out! And oh shit! The kiss! Hysterical! I was cracking up the whole chapter! Can't wait for more; great job! :)

yes i like. there's more right ...right cause there has to be the ackwardness of the characters is great! it can go so many places, please stay with it. and hopefully you have some more inspiration soon ...really soon ... cause you kind of left us hanging ... (one of my faviorte things) away
thanx
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