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by Lilysoos

schedule August 9, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I made this account just to review your story. Please change the settings to accept anonymous reviews as i think this story would get many many more.
I adore jess I think he is so cute and unique i adore him.
schedule August 9, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Oh man, how could Sam think Jess would just tell him everything? When Jess is supposedly straight and dating his best friend? Wouldn't Sam realize Jess is in denial?

And then Jess: all his life thinking he's straight and then meeting Sam and realizing he's attracted to another guy. It must be terrifying.

Great chapter; as usual I can't wait for more! :)
schedule August 8, 2011 at 12:00 AM
In the last part I just wanted to slap Jess over the head and kick him a couple times for being a jerk to poor Sam :(( please update soon :)
schedule August 8, 2011 at 12:00 AM
dont stop i need moree! i love this the suspense the mystery hahahaha
schedule August 8, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I never really leave reviews but i had to for this story. I love everything about it and i love Sam he's the bomb. Cant wait for the next chapter
person Ataraxia
schedule August 8, 2011 at 12:00 AM
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!! I need more!! Ahhhh! I can't wait!
schedule August 7, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Hey Lily! Welcome back! ;) I hear Greece is beautiful!

So...Jess finally admitted his feelings for Sam! Even though he admitted them to himself, that's a start! lol

Oh, when Sam was introducing Jamie to Jess and Julie, he said, "This is Jess, Anna's girlfriend." You meant boyfriend, right? And dinning room table is dining room table.

But anyway, don't mind me; just the editor in me that always picks out stuff. Don't take it personally, I've found major typos in stores on column aisles! lol Seriously!

I'm glad you're back and look forward to more; this is such a funny story! :)
person jaskolka
schedule August 7, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I so love this story. Jess' POV works perfectly fine - his thoughts are so hilarious that they never fail to crack me up.
The way he has been trying to deal with his obvious attraction to Sam through self denial was thoroughly amusing and... cute.
You have also left us with a cliffhanger...
I am truly happy that Jess has finally started to acknowledge his real feelings. Is it a breakthrough coming? I can't wait to see how he (and the poor Sam) is planning to deal with the whole situation. I hope that Anna is not going to get hurt too badly in the process...
schedule July 29, 2011 at 12:00 AM
oooohhhh.... poor confused 'straight' man... lol!!! wonder what Anna will have to say to her bf's sudden new interest...
schedule July 28, 2011 at 12:00 AM
OMG! OMG! lol so funny!

Wow. Calm down woman! haha, great line and: AH! The 'Just got fucked' dude! I was cracking up the whole chapter!

So...this Jamie character; seems like he's gonna be one pain in the ass for Sam! I can't wait to find out the reason Sam didn't want to follow him to NYC. (Shit, I forgot; are they in NYC?)

I noticed a couple of errors when you were using prepositions: 'Anna invited me over ON Saturday evening', not 'at'. And 'I was sitting IN Anna's kitchen' watching.... and listenING', not listened. It would be different if you said 'I SAT in Anna's kitchen and LISTENED TO....' Anyway, just thought I'd point them out if you wanted to go back and change them.

Awesome chapter Lily; can't wait to find out whey Sam and Jamie are still fighting! lol :)