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OH OH OH!!!!!!!!!!!!!! WOOP!! IM sooo pumped to read more the bad guys are on the move sweet!! I love the ending line it was perfect!!! And i really hope Andre makes a move...>_< im a perv very big one hahahaha ohhhh i cant wait!!! I really like how the plot is moving very very good makes me feel like im watching a movie cuz its so...smooth i guess haha i dont know how to explain it. Also im writing my own story i was wondering if you have any tips? :D or if you would be willing to do a project together? I really love to wright and i have ideas but..it's hard to get the words flowing hahaha but i would be deeply honored to do a project with you..if you would be willing... :) Thank you so much for another chapter!! XD

I don't know...I didn't really think you had too much filler in MD, maybe some but certainly not so much as to make it tedious. I do, however, hate insanely short chapters as they don't satisfy any needs, but only tease until something better comes along. In my own stories I've tried to keep to a 10,000 word minimum and a 12,000 to 15,000 word maximum, so everyone was satisfied and I never went off on wild tangents! ;o)

On a literary note, I hated this chapter...I hated what they did to the priests and believers and how they desecrated the sanctity of the church and hallowed ground. It was written well, but very offensive and I really wish you would have stuck to vampires not being able to enter holy ground.

Sorry for my unflattering opinion this time, but I did think you did a good job writing this chapter even if I didn't particularly like the content, so please don't take offense. ^^

hmmm... so we get a priest just to kill him? oh well we got to see Cresil again so thats all that matters. ooh Akemi sounds interesting, kinda like a ninja almost. haha jk. but does her name mean anything or did you just come up with it? Yay we got to see Seth again. a chapter is always good if Seth is in it. hm both Cresil and Seth in a chapter is a double bonus! i also really liked Meier in this chapter. i don't know why but ever since that first chapter Meier's become one of my favorite characters. which is ironic since i didn't really like him in moonlight denial. yes i was greatly saddened we didn't get to see Demetri and Seth get it on. but i would me extremely happy to see Seth and Meier get together. and Andre poncing on Nicoli sounds like a great idea. on a small note thou. i understand were your coming from when you say you want to stick close to whats relevant to the plot. but sometimes its good to have a little of that. sometimes if you dont then the story gets very choppy and things dont link together right. with moonlight denial ya there were some extra fillers in there but the story flowed together well and sometimes little fillers added to the story to give it its own personality. im not trying to tell you what to do, after all it is your story and you can choose to write it how you want. all im saying is that ive seen other stories were people have done that and the story lost some of its value because it didn't fit together like a story should. okay im done lecturing you now. cant wait for your next update darkness. huggies XD!

I'm sorry, I'm sorry! I'm still here! I haven't abandoned you! RL has been hectic lately. Not necessarily a bad hectic, but hectic. I was on vacation in NC for ten days from July 22nd-31st, and while I had internet connection (most of the time, anyway... The connection at our beach house was spotty at best where my room was located, so I wound up using my friend's hotspot thing on her cell), between doing vacation stuff (swimming in the ocean!!) and doing my online homework, there wasn't much time to review the new chapters. And then once I got home on the 31st, there was some time after I unpacked, but after a ten hour car ride, I just wanted to die... So I unpacked and crashed. xD Woke up the next day, decided my room was a disaster area and pretty much tore my room apart, organizing, cleaning, getting rid of stuff, the works. And then the next day, I got sick... ._. Stayed home all day, went on a Miyazaki movie binge, slept, etc. And I was pretty much right as rain two days later. It was weird... But I spent Friday with my favorite sister (the one who's only a year and twenty-four days older than me, and closest to me in age), whom I only get to see like once a week, if that, and Sat. I went to a nearby race track to watch my one friend drag race (but we kind of got rained out... It was a bummer). So now, here I am, and I've missed reviewing two chapters... Please forgive me! Not even three chapters in, and I've missed some! What kind of fangirl am I?! Dx But okay, I'm done being dramatic. xD Onward to the actual reviews!
Chapter 2: This was part of the sneak peek of MC you posted in MD. :D I was wondering when this would come into play. I remember thinking before MC actually started, that there was probably going to be this build-up period in the beginning, like it would leave off right after MD, where Nic and Amelia are still in school and all that jazz. But then you wrote this chapter, and I couldn't help feeling a little relieved that you skipped ahead in time, because, aside from the extra Ethan/Nicoli smex we MIGHT have gotten during that time period, I think it probably would've been pretty boring. Although, I would've liked to have seen just a little bit of what Nicoli's training had been like. ;D Anyway, I'm getting a little off topic. Does anyone else find it really, super adorable that Nicoli and Amelia share the same bed? They really are the best of friends. It's just really cute and heart warming. Poor Nicoli. I almost wonder if Ethan's blood would still work on his eye, like it did that one time after their mental training with Gavin in MD (even though I sure Nicoli would squirm at the idea of having blood dropped into his eye again xD) Ahh! His eye was bleeding!! I wonder if he told anyone about that..? Lol. Mr. Vander's pessimism amused me, even if it didn't amuse Nicoli or Amelia. When she said her name was Roni, my first thought was 'pepperoni?' So her name is now Pepper Roni in my book. xDD But yea, even if her name amuses me, she herself kind of freaks me out. I get why they call her the female mini-version of Seth. Haha. Nicoli and Amelia have gotten even more cocky since MD ended. I suppose it's because they've been practicing and training,and they now have the skills to back up their words. Which is AWESOME!! They were really holding their own for a while, but I think even trained as they are, three vampires against two humans is still very unbalanced. Which is why they need... ETHAN!! -hearts- Lol. "I wouldn't drop either of you precious, fragile, squishy humans." WoO! Go Amelia! I laughed so hard when she set Roni's shirt on fire. That was priceless. Yaaay! Nicoli and Amelia can finally hold their own against vampires!! This was a fun chapter. I really enjoyed it. There was much action and witty banter, both of which I love to pieces. So, thank you for another wonderful chapter! I have to get back to my homework, since it's the last week of class, my teacher is piling everything on us at once, and I'm swamped, but I really needed to take a break, and it was the perfect time to send in a quick review. I'll review the others at a later time. Hopefully tonight, still, but probably tomorrow or later. -squeezy death huggles- xDD

Wow that was unexpected!!!! But you really have me wondering where you go ^^ What blessing does Meier want to remove? And what has Cresil to do with that!!!! Oh I so can't wait for the next chappie!!!!! I like this shorter writing stil a lot better!!! The chappies of MD where sometimes so long that it took me 1-2 houres to reed!!! That was really iritating because I always discoverd the update late in the evening and stayd up till 1 or 2 am to finish the chappie and then I was totally exausted in the morning!!!! So I like this crisp and short way better!!! Although I really don't mind if the whole book is as long as MD!!! Better doing shorter chappies and more of those ^^ Ok see you soon!!!!

Dark indeed but definitely pulls you in even more because now we know some of the thoughts of the evil ones...yes I've dubbed Meiner and his group 'The Evil Ones'. I use to care what happened to Meiner to make him so bitter but now I kind of believe he has always had this in him and it just took someone to pull it out. Maybe he'll start looking up to Cresil has his new father figure. Great update!

WOOOHOO! Did I ever tell u that YOUR WRITING is one of the best I have read on this site??? And thank you for always inspiring me!!! This is true quality work. Yay for getting MD copywrited! How did you do that exactly if u don't mind me asking? Also yay for making shorter chaps. I'm sure othas are happy of this choice. I enjoyed this chapter! I just devoured it up! Those poor priests!!! Evil Meier's clan!! It was interested how Meier's skin was itching. Oh new character...Akemi! Thats a cool name. Can't wait to find out what happens next. Please update soon!

Ugh. Fml. I haven't had any Internet access at all... Awesome updates. I'm glad I finally had a chance to read. Hopefully, my computer will be fixed soon. Hopefully. I can't wait to see how the story progresses. Good luck writing!

YAY action between Nicoli and Ethan! Excited. Can't believe they are joking about Andre and Nicoli getting down and dirty while Ethan watches...yeah like he could just stay on the side lines. LOL...great update!

How romantic... #swoon# wish that could happen to me... even tho my ass is soo not for fucking with LOL