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November 22, 2010 at 12:00 AM
wat an interesting avatar u have...
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September 11, 2010 at 12:00 AM
This story should get 5+ rating for its plot and character development - i kept reading even though it was true labor to wade through the overuse of the pronoun HE - with sooo many male characters to keep track of you just gotta use more of their names or more descriptions of who's speaking and to whom. Also things kept jumping from past tense to present tense. I thought the Beta system was supposed to help with these kind of issues. I hope you keep writing - i really want to see how this plays out - but please work on your use of the English language