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neh, if he doesn't trust, how does he trust Tyrell? Or is it a brothers in the business kinda thing?
I think it's going to take a while for our wounded sparrow to come around.

Great story so far ! ^^
I'm looking forward the next chapter...

Wait... How did Michael call him in sick and prepare a credit card in his name when Michael doesn't know his name...?

I like what you have so far, but there are some things you need to work on. There are several grammatical errors and a few spelling that are easily fixed if you or your future beta rereads through. Also, you seem to switch between past and present tenses. I understand if you accidentally jumped between them: it can be difficult to stick with one while typing. One last thing: If you're planning to have romantic relations at some point, it would be good to change your story type from general to whichever you're planning.

I look forward to the road this story takes. Good luck! :)

Love it. Poor boy cant even relax enough to enjoy his surroundings. I hope we get to find out his name soon. I can't wait for the next chapter.

great start! i cannot wait for the next chapter!

gotta admit it. If I'd lived his life, I'd be pretty sure every favour has a catch to it tool. Hopefully Michael can convince him otherwise.

Very interesting. I love child rescue stories, and the vampire element adds a very interesting twist.

Hello there,

I just wanted to say that I really enjoyed your story - it looks really promising.
I am hooked on vampire slash so I can't wait for next chapter.
Actually, I am also quite happy that you didn't throw in lots of sex from the very beginning - I would love to read and see how the relationship between the two is going to progress at a hmm... slower pace and then its transition to something more than friendship...
I don't really enjoy it when protagonists in fics rush into sex out of nowhere...

Looking forward to more from you and good luck with your story;)

Very interesting story. I hope we get to read more soon.