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April 3, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I hope you decide to continue this story!
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December 6, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I love twisted psychological fiction. The kind of relationship I would call the cops on in real life. Lol. I find it intriguing that you chose (so far) to leave the narrator nameless. Interesting! All I could think at the end of the second chapter was "ZOMG! He kissed him right after he puked!" (I am terrified of puke and couldn't seem to NOT fixate on that). This is a great story though.
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August 3, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I love this, truly love it! I'm going to add it to my 'recommended reading' on my profile :)
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August 1, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Oh wow! I can tell you I've never enjoyed an original fic so much! The characters were so real, and I could visually picture everything clearly. You have a unique gift. I've read all your fics, and you are my favorite author on here! Please write more!
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July 18, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Normally, I'm all about leaving a man who can't be changed(like a rapist, for example), But their love is just so ridiculously devout that I am actually footing for them to get back together...hmmm...go figure. Anyways, I hope they can work things out...make a compromise of some sort. I look forward to more!
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July 9, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Oh, I love this story; I like the way you write - its very eloquent, and I like the comparisons you make when you describe things (such as the olld instruction manuel when things are out of reach)
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July 7, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I read the last two chapters in one go and I found them GREAT! Chapter 7 even made me tear up a bit so don't doubt about your work..you're doing an excellent job :D
This story never ceases to surprise me: Charlie's arrest was unexpected but I'm glad that he finally opened his eyes and realised what his actions were doing to Marc. His letter to Marc was very touching because you could feel Charlie's pain from disrupting all he could have with Marc due to his blind rage and his obsession to control other people lives. Speaking of Marcus I'm afraid of what will happen to him now that he's so vulnerable after such a trauma becuase it seems that he has some conflicting emotions about Charlie and his old friend Andy, plus Andy's boyfriend doensn't seem very friendly...so everything can still change for the worse!! lol :)
This story never ceases to surprise me: Charlie's arrest was unexpected but I'm glad that he finally opened his eyes and realised what his actions were doing to Marc. His letter to Marc was very touching because you could feel Charlie's pain from disrupting all he could have with Marc due to his blind rage and his obsession to control other people lives. Speaking of Marcus I'm afraid of what will happen to him now that he's so vulnerable after such a trauma becuase it seems that he has some conflicting emotions about Charlie and his old friend Andy, plus Andy's boyfriend doensn't seem very friendly...so everything can still change for the worse!! lol :)
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July 6, 2011 at 12:00 AM
So I really liked your writing this chapter, not that I didn't before, but I loved "I’m watching a movie in my head. It’s not recommended for children as there is graphic violence, coarse language, nudity and sexuality. It stars me and Charlie – a drama, with tragic and thriller elements. The plot was interesting, but the pacing was rushed. I give it five out of ten stars."
And the story took a turn that I totally didn't expect - Charlie in jail? Anyway, can't wait to find out what happens next! Keep up the good work
And the story took a turn that I totally didn't expect - Charlie in jail? Anyway, can't wait to find out what happens next! Keep up the good work
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July 6, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Re: Chapter 7
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Upon review of your story, it was noticed that you cite/quote from another source, but that it is not properly cited.
Please read the below listed FAQ, for the format that is needed.
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Should you, the author use extensive quotations and references, footnoting would be best in that for instance.
Thank you for your cooperation.
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July 6, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Ahhh I just read all seven chapters straight, that must tell you I'm in love! lol Update soon please! >.<