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for Tear Down The Sky

by CarnivalOfRust

schedule May 24, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Oh my, this is amazing! I love your writing style, puts you right there with the character! LOLs Please continue!
person fudge
schedule May 23, 2011 at 12:00 AM
great ch., can't wait for the next!
person Poppyhigh
schedule May 23, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Really want to know what will happen next? Waiting for next update. Supporting youM
person Jazz
schedule May 23, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Hey, :) I like the premise and everything, this has potential to be a fun read, however the pov is confusing. The tone is first person but the words used are third person, and it makes it difficult to follow. I keep getting hung up on the words rather than the story. I hope you keep writing, I'd like to read more :)
schedule May 22, 2011 at 12:00 AM
i love it..Cant wait for the next chapter :)
schedule May 22, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I enjoyed the first chapter and look forward to what's going to happen in upcoming installments
person kylee123
schedule May 22, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Very nice new story. I am eager to read some more.
schedule May 22, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I like this a lot. I know thAt it's going to be good when the story starts with someon making a bad but very fun decision.

Can't wait for more!
schedule May 22, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I've read a few stories on here like this, where the guy wakes up from a one-night stand nursing a hangover, but this story was so freakin' funny! Patrick's thoughts are so amusing; his panic attack, his ogling his "one-night stand", etc.

Great chapter; I can't wait to read more! :)
person Yacumo
schedule May 22, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Nice beginning! Too bad the hot guy did not wake up. I hope you really but really update soon.