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for Desert Jewel

by yukisan

person JayDee
schedule May 19, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Very subtle use of the prompt! Lot better than my blatent name-drops... This dancer truely sounds like a living work of art already, with only the civilising influence of dancing in a palace to polish away her presently incondite nature. Even though he appeared only briefly I found the merchant a somewhat nastier man than the buyer... A real creep of a slave trader. Good job on that characterisation.
schedule May 18, 2011 at 12:00 AM
there's going to be more yeah? please say there's going to be more.