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March 31, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Ha, Riska, you're funny! ;) It's almost Easter, right? lol
So, is that it? Evanson gave in to his physical yearning, even though he thought it's wrong? And now they're together? But could Evanson ever come to love Caden the way Caden loves (or thinks he loves) Evanson?
Good chapter Riska! Welcome back! :)
So, is that it? Evanson gave in to his physical yearning, even though he thought it's wrong? And now they're together? But could Evanson ever come to love Caden the way Caden loves (or thinks he loves) Evanson?
Good chapter Riska! Welcome back! :)
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December 18, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Hey Riska! Glad to see you're back! And this chapter was great!!!! :)
I can't see Peter ever turning Caden in. I'm sure Peter feels hurt, maybe betrayed, but he did give in to Caden in this chapter. He gave Caden what he wanted; he took control. But maybe that's why Peter feels guilt; because he's giving in to Caden; he's enabling him to act out this fantasy even though they both know it's wrong.
Is Caden going to explain himself to Peter? Looking forward to more. :)
Have a happy holiday Riska! =)
I can't see Peter ever turning Caden in. I'm sure Peter feels hurt, maybe betrayed, but he did give in to Caden in this chapter. He gave Caden what he wanted; he took control. But maybe that's why Peter feels guilt; because he's giving in to Caden; he's enabling him to act out this fantasy even though they both know it's wrong.
Is Caden going to explain himself to Peter? Looking forward to more. :)
Have a happy holiday Riska! =)
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October 11, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Wow. This is amazing. Very original. I hope you update soon! >.< I need my next fix! lol. Yaoi is truely my drug...er...anti-drug...yea...thats what I ment... ^.^;
~BPR
~BPR
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October 8, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Oh.My.GOD!!!!! Just read chapter 1. Shit, that was incredible! I can't imagine being blind and having someone just "take" you like that and there really isn't anything you can do but lay back and let it happen. What a premise!!! Off to read chapter 2.
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October 8, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Well, it answers a few questions, but what exactly does Caden have? Or what did he have? And what's dermal inplants? Inplants underneath the skin?
I did notice some typos. I'll point them out in case you wanted to go back and fix them: grouping should be groping, fantasying should be fantasizing, feverously should be feverishly, slighted should be slightest, testicals is testicles, and when you say diagnostics, do you mean diagnosis? And when you write, "our next meeting had me on pins", do you mean pins and needles? Also at the beginning of the chapter you should write Caden's P.O.V.: so the reader knows you switched pov's. And be careful of your tenses; the story is usually in the present tense, but in this chapter you switch back and forth w/in paragraphs.
Ok, sorry this sounded mean. I'm not trying to be mean; I just wanted to point out some things to make the story better.
It was a great chapter. I did like reading it from Caden's pov. He is one sick little pup, isn't he? lol :)
I did notice some typos. I'll point them out in case you wanted to go back and fix them: grouping should be groping, fantasying should be fantasizing, feverously should be feverishly, slighted should be slightest, testicals is testicles, and when you say diagnostics, do you mean diagnosis? And when you write, "our next meeting had me on pins", do you mean pins and needles? Also at the beginning of the chapter you should write Caden's P.O.V.: so the reader knows you switched pov's. And be careful of your tenses; the story is usually in the present tense, but in this chapter you switch back and forth w/in paragraphs.
Ok, sorry this sounded mean. I'm not trying to be mean; I just wanted to point out some things to make the story better.
It was a great chapter. I did like reading it from Caden's pov. He is one sick little pup, isn't he? lol :)
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August 26, 2011 at 12:00 AM
So Peter gave in to Caden and just screwed him in his own house w/his mother downstairs? That doesn't sound like Peter.
And now Peter's giving in to Caden all the time. Caden will never leave. He has this unhealthy crush on Peter. How ugly was Caden when he was younger? And he had no friends b/c of this? So how did he get nice looking? When he turned sixteen he what? Came into his own and got better looking? Then people wanted to be his friend? It's all a bit confusing. But of course, Peter treated him the same; Peter could never see him. Peter loved his personality.
Poor Caden; he's so confused and misguided.
And now Peter's giving in to Caden all the time. Caden will never leave. He has this unhealthy crush on Peter. How ugly was Caden when he was younger? And he had no friends b/c of this? So how did he get nice looking? When he turned sixteen he what? Came into his own and got better looking? Then people wanted to be his friend? It's all a bit confusing. But of course, Peter treated him the same; Peter could never see him. Peter loved his personality.
Poor Caden; he's so confused and misguided.
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August 21, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I can feel the turmoil Peter is going through about his decision not to report Caden. But why is Caden doing this? I was totally confused at one point; I didn't understand what Caden was talking about; it didn't make any sense to me: he was explaining something to Peter about his new school. He said at his new school they hated him b/c he wasn't like them. Then he said, "Eventually I did and I was beautiful. Then and only then they loved me." What? What was he talking about? Eventually I did and I was beautiful? Huh? Did I miss something? lol
Anyway, he did it again. Then he cries, so he's regretting it? What's wrong with him; he couldn't just tell Peter how he feels?
Awesome chapter! I'm looking forward to the next chapter. :)
Anyway, he did it again. Then he cries, so he's regretting it? What's wrong with him; he couldn't just tell Peter how he feels?
Awesome chapter! I'm looking forward to the next chapter. :)
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August 8, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Finally, I got to confirm my suspicion was true.... It was Caden.... I understand that many physically handicapped people don't live a meaningful life... They just give up on life, and leave a dull life just like Peter.... Caden should've confessed his feelings... Oh dear does Caden have any clue how much he might have hurt Peter? Why did Peter become like this? He does seem a very happy when Caden is with him.... I hope the boy brings back meaning to Peter's life
Keep up the good work!
Keep up the good work!
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August 7, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Wow. tsk tsk Caden! He probably should have asked first.
Ah may zing story! I enjoy your writing and the plot idea. Hopefully you see it through, even if it turns into a short story. I really am curious to know what Mr. Evanson decides to do....
Ah may zing story! I enjoy your writing and the plot idea. Hopefully you see it through, even if it turns into a short story. I really am curious to know what Mr. Evanson decides to do....
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August 6, 2011 at 12:00 AM
What a wonderful story you got here... I love it! And the 5th chapter is specially good. I wonder how it will be like for now on between those too now that the truth is known! I'll be waiting for the next chapter with great impatience :)