rate_review Reviews

I really like this story. I think you lost people in the chapter titled Strange, mainly because you were adding all these names that were hard to relate to anything relevant to the story. It wasn't so much confusing and I see what was trying to be done but I think it should have been done another way. But besides that I think this story is pretty great. The main characters are fun. You left off on a good cliff hanger that I'd like to see be resolved. The whole dan aspect is interesting but more awkward than anything else...I don't see exactly where you're going with it, but maybe this is on purpose. Your writing flows wells and isn't bogged down and droning like other fan fiction has a tendency to be. I really hope you continue. 😊

Love the story so far truly, just such a place to stop. Hope you choose to keep going with this.

I really love this story and I wish you would update it. I've re-read it a couple times now and I love the plot so far. I really would like to know how everything with Dan/Spencer and Patrick works out. I really hope you update soon and you hope that you haven't lost interest in this story. Good luck and hope to be reading it again soon!

Well, I just read throught the first 13 chapters of the story and I am hooked! I thought the whole idea of meeting from a wrong number was very creative, and Lars and Patrick are such a good couple (plus the sex scenes are hot as well XD ) The story has a nice plot and is pretty deep at times, however when more characters were being introduced, I found myself a little confused at first, but I eventually caught on to who they were. Chapter 13 left off on such a cliff hanger and I can't wait for the next update!

Great story! Interesting characters too - and getting more complex. I hope there's still more to come...

love this story, there are so many subplots intertwining that it never gets boring without it being headache inducing. Sometimes though in certain parts, you wonder "who are those characters ? did i click somewhere and end up on another page ?" but i think it's just because it's a story on the internet ; in a book, the layout would have made it clearer on a page.
Good characterization although some aspects could be more developped, especially patrick's : a clumsy horny and lucky vet, and with this, i think i summed him up. I'm not saying to go all drama and angsty with him (please no! he's good like this) but a more indepth approach would be nice. It's like meeting someone new and fun and you just want to know more about this person. About Lars' characterization, I go with "he's a simple no-shit guy" so his actions and way of thinking are direct and the narration reflects this so yeah me like it very much. The daddy issue, I'm a bit of a sucker for those kind of stories (recommands desert dropping by domluka) and the father and son potential hooked me in.
well, that's it. I'll definitely be following this story. Thanks a lot for such a good read !

awesome, loved it, hope dans not a stalker creepe, wonder if we will meet gabe, i hope patrick isnt gullabull

would so follow this story if i new how, i guess i just gotta keep cheacking back to see if a new chapter is added

Perhaps it's because I read through all of the chapters in one sitting, but I do find myself getting confused when certain names pop up (basically everyone except for Lars, Patrick, Brigid, Dan), or when you write from the perspective of another character. The whole thing jumps around a bit too much for it to be strictly smooth reading.

That being said, though, it's really an enjoyable story. The characters that I am familiar with (Lars, Patrick) are likable and endearing. The premise is interesting, too, though I'm not really sure how the plot will progress now. Overall, I like reading Wrong Number! Looking forward to the next update!

Oh man, this is CRAZY! I don't know if I should laugh, or feel bad for them all. I can only imagine where this is going, and I need to know more... Update soon!

Ha, so now the good Senator finds out he had twins! lol

What a tangled web you weave jenni! Now with this mess, there's also the mess with Patrick's original caller (shit, I forgot his name, sorry) and his fiancee who's pregnant. I can't wait to find out how you're going to incorporate all these wonderful stories into Lars and Patrick's story! :)