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May 1, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Hey! I love this story so far! I think I read this last week or the week before.
Anyway, good luck w/the collaboration and I can't wait to read more! :)
Anyway, good luck w/the collaboration and I can't wait to read more! :)
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April 30, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Interesting chapter. Things are getting hotter faster. I've been meaning to see if you updated and now I've finally got a chance. I'm pretty dure it's safe to say that most of your readers hate Mason. Is he hurting his sub, Nathan(?)? And your blow job. Taylor was so cute, giving his second blow job- I loved the part where you said his cheeks puffed out like a chipmunks. I wonder how he'll get punished for not swallowing all of the cum. I'm looking forward to your next chapter.
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April 30, 2011 at 12:00 AM
So this is the same one that was in the romance- slash section with more editing? Is anything else going to change? Will the story remain the same?
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April 30, 2011 at 12:00 AM
good start
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April 13, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Hmmm, sounds like a punishment is in order? *Crosses fingers for a spanking session* Liking it so far >3
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April 13, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Wow, I hope Taylor's getting paid overtime for this! This definitely goes under the "reasonable and customary" don'tcha think? hahah
Wonder if the killer was watching them?
Wonder if the killer was watching them?
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April 12, 2011 at 12:00 AM
So glad to see that you updated Chapter 3! Loving the story so far. The only constructive criticism I can point out is that when your characters are having an internal monologue you might want to distinguish it from the rest of the normal descriptive paragraphs. That's the only comment I have so far, beyond a thanks!
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April 11, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Great chapter. Can't wait what will happen next.
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April 11, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Wow, I've never seen people dressed up in bondage outfits. Your descriptions seem pretty wild! Seems both outfits Matt and Taylor are wearing leave little to the imagination.
I'm looking forward to reading about what happens in the club.
I didn't notice any run-on sentences, and I thought your grammar and spelling were spot on! Keep up the good work! :)
I'm looking forward to reading about what happens in the club.
I didn't notice any run-on sentences, and I thought your grammar and spelling were spot on! Keep up the good work! :)
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April 11, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Very nice story. I'm glad Matt finally made amends for his behaviour with Taylor. It's nice to see him other than angry too. I also like Matt's relationship with Cam, and am in love with Smokey. Plus, Taylor is adorable, but he's strong too. I think he's my favourite character so far.
I'm looking forward to seeing them play at being a couple... How long will they last until they jump each other? They seem to have a good chemistry together when they are not fighting. :)
I'm looking forward to seeing them play at being a couple... How long will they last until they jump each other? They seem to have a good chemistry together when they are not fighting. :)