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Wow, great start! I'm loving this story already! I think Joan is a hoot! I can't believe they thought she didn't wear underwear! lol

I did have a question tho: if Billi is the younger sister, and she's a what, sophomore, then how old is Joel?

Anyway....can't wait for ch. 3! :)

Beautifully written prologue! Off to next chap...

This was pretty impressive! You have talent for sure in writing. I want to read your other stories 8D Also, there were two mistakes here: “Damn,” I wheezed and picked up the last half of my bagel from under my feet out mine. I’m glad you figured out how to use that belted-seat-doohickey this morning. You don’t usually put it on.” There should be a quotation mark before the word "I'm." Here is the otha error: I started to set my bag and bagel in the truck to catch the little gray and white terror when she ran past me, but she cut sideways to ran past Billi and into our house instead. Word "ran" should be "run" before "past Billi..." Anyway, please write some mo!!!

Hi,

I just wanted to let you know how much I enjoyed the Carnalli Complex series you wrote and
hope some day you continue their saga in another story.

I think JC is going to find himself in deep trouble with his neighbor and look forward to
reading more of this new story of yours. I love his family they are a riot. Who is that guy
on the bike?

Looking forward to reading more of this new story and thanks for sharing it.

I just signed up so I could review your story because it wouldn't let me otherwise.

I think JC is so cute and just love his sister and even his parents/mothers. I hope that Jake doesn't hurt
him later for following him in the woods. This kind of reminds me of a movie I watched once about a guy
in a wheelchair watching his neighbors and then witnesses a murder but no one believes him and killer
comes after him and his girlfriend. I know it probably won't be like that but still I think he should
be careful.

Thanks for writing it and I hope you update frequently.