rate_review Reviews

:) This is a real cute story!

Though I wish it could be longer :D

Sasha seems like a super adorable kid, and Dom seems like an ass-h. Just sayin'

But its cute.

Thanks

I'm so glad to see chapter two! ANd I hope any blocks or lazy plot-bunnies will get out of your way, because I'm VERY keen on finding out what will happen here... ;)

I don't know why but this made me LOL so much. Must be my mood :D

Keep up the good work, I can't wait for the next chapter ^^

Jesus, these kids are so nasty! Seems like Dominic and James belong together.

I feel bad for Sasha; I hope he makes real friends in this new school.

And wow, it really takes thirty minutes to get to school????? Shit, my kids would never make it! Luckily our high school is only five minutes away!

Good chapter, BUT TOO SHORT!!!!!! Looking forward to the next one! :)

Oh my gosh, I am definitely worried about poor Sasha now and wonder what kind of
dastardly plans Dominic has in store for him. I am thinking maybe Sasha will
eventually turn the tables on Dominic. Won't Sasha's father or even Dominic's get
angry with Dominic should he go to far with whatever scheme he and his friend
James are talking about?

James and Dominic's little unfeeling relationship is intriguing. I don't think I like James - he seems a little bit creepy. Still that's a good job you did of making him come across that way whether it was intended or not. Dominic continues to be totally awesome. You can see him sort of - just sort of - beginning to develop interest in Sasha (in some form or other.) It's a great chapter! That last little conversation gave me the willies, but that's a good thing!

Great job Rico!

ooOOOoo I like this ;)

I really enjoyed the first chapter of your story and the summary you wrote about it is intriguing.

I already love Sasha and am worried about what Dominic will make him do.

If you have a mailing list for updates, I would like to be added to it.

Wow. Admittedly I don't read a whole lot online. Not as much as I should anyway. But this was good. The sentence structure was fairly short and easy to understand - that's important to me, because I have the attention span of a gnat. I tend to drift away when sentences are too long-winded.

Now one of my pet peeves is a certain overuse of -ing verbs in online fiction. I think I noticed two near the beginning, and then I got so wrapped up in the story that if there were any others, they went right over my head. (I know, that almost sounds like a critique, but it's 100% a compliment. Believe me - ask all my friends - -ing overuse makes me batshit crazy XD)

Dominic is so entertaining. His cold, calculated mannerisms are utterly... what's the word?... tantalizing? He seems to have such an authoritative aura. If there's any insecurity, he keeps it well hidden. He really drove the chapter, so that was a great job on your part.

Don't know much about Sasha yet, so I look forward to seeing more on him!

~Clover~

wow i dont usually read original stories but i thought i would give it a shot! good first chapter and i cant wait to read more! :D