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My advice...Take the story down and get it published! With a few grammar corrections, I think that you could absolutely get this story published. :) Its now the same old, angsty crap that I see published time and again, I VERY mush enjoyed Pack Dynamics.

Thanks a lot for your hard work, I really enjoyed this story. Casey's struggle between dominance and submission was something you really managed to impress on me and I could relate with the human rationalization that he shouldn't submit and having to fight part of himself because his cat wanted to submit to Mason. I could also really feel Mason's longing and pain. Poor boy, things were really rough on him. But I really enjoyed the fact that the story stared two guys, with al the non-comunication that entails. Truly well done. As I said before, Thanks for the wonderful story.

Excellent! Very good with a balance action and romance.

I would definitely love to see an epilogue for this story if you are willing to write one. We got all the build-up and drama to the relationship and i just want to see more of the end result.

I love happy endings. :3 Mason's going to have his hands full but I'm sure he wouldn't want it any other way- and I'm glad Casey learned to stop fighting himself.

This story was very enjoyable! <3 Thank you for writing and sharing.
I think my favorite element is that you showed more of Mason than what's usually shown in a possessive lover's viewpoint. I liked that you showed how much he cares for Casey, and how much he was shaken up over Casey's sudden disappearance. It really makes a nice balance to Casey's personal struggle against his own submissive nature. ^.^

Umm... For deleted scenes/sequel... how about Mason and Casey going back to the Pet Shop and picking out mating collars (I keep thinking of that nice fancy one.../drool)? Informing Ty about Casey's promotion to a Beta? Mason and Casey visiting Shelby in Montreal? And.. ahh.. you mentioned that Casey has seen Mason's erect cock before... was there a backstory to that? :D
Also I'd love to see more of Eugene, he's my third favorite character. (Guess who the first two are, lol.)

Actually more of the gang in general. And how they reconcile the fact that they're part of Alliance and how Casey is a Betrayer. They may have had the same goals (find Shelby/find out cause of mysterious occurrings) before, but it probably isn't as likely for next meetings/jobs.

Even though your story evolved very much around the relatively rampant idea of "submission/dominance" it still differed from other sub/dom stories out there. You have incorporated a perfect balance of a pecking order relationship without the tension of excess sexual coercion. This in my mind created the perfect "top" Mason. He’s always dominant during the right moments to put Casey in place, and yet also perfect in the way to wait for Casey to respond to his feelings and needs. This deviates from the normal dom who just takes, takes, and takes regardless of the subs feelings and struggles. (I almost thought that Casey was going to lose his virginity within days of becoming part of the pack (typical route), no way would I have thought that he would leave his pack as a virgin for Shelby.)
Over all, you have created a perfect dom/sub relationship with love and affection. Words can't describe how sexy, wild, animalistic yet human you made your characters to be. Definitely hard to find another story like this again.

Amazing story! Mason and Casey were so adorable at the end. Loved it :D

I too was shocked to see you ended this so quickly! You did have so much material to go on for a few more chapters at least. While I'm glad that you did finish your story...there's so much more I wanted to see! Please please do a sequel perhaps?

The best part about this story has always been that INTENSE tension between Casey and Mason...and the last chapter left me wanting more or thinking there oculd've been more. Like it seemed as if you could've definitely milked more really really good drama and angst. I wanted to see Casey suffer more for Mason and get a bigger dose of his own medicine when he thought Mason may have been leaving. I wanted to see more angry Mason and more confrontation from him. I wanted to know more inner details of why Casey left and didn't realize how much he needed Mason besides the desire for independence and how he seemed to be in 'bliss' with Casey. Like was it obvious that during those 2 years he even missed Mason besides his 'cat' missing being submissive. I really wanted to know that...if you had already answered that in the chapters, sorry in advance!
It just seemed a bit abrupt how quickly and cleanly he realized his feelings for Mason and was done with Casey even though he knew it all along. So the explanations are all there...but I think you needed to draw it out...sorry that's just me but I like to milk all the angst as I can! But the ending scene with them was short but sweet...I wanted more cuddle time; or the morning after! :)

So therefore I can't help but think their relationship is still a bit one sided with Mason being head over heels for him and Casey not feeling or 'showing' the same depth of feelings even though they know they are meant for eachother. It also seemed as if Casey's cat craved Mason's 'alphaness' more than just Casey craved Mason in a way (although they are one and the same).

And as mentioned before you definitely have a lot of 'conspiracy' and government things to work with from this story in case you want to continue (hint, hint, nudge, nudge)!! :D

I took the time to write this long review just because I really, really want more and not to criticize you, so please don't take it the wrong way! It's just that I loved this story so much and with the way you were building it I totally thought you were going to go for the long run.

Anyways, congrats on finishing your first story and overall it was totally and utterly amazing. You wrote an amazingly awesome story with great character depth, drama, and tension that's really hard to come across. You undeniably have a talent so please exercise it because you have a lot of followers now :) :P

Thanks again for the story and hope to see more of your work XD

I loved this story! it was amazing. i would love to read an epilogue! i hope you write more stories too! :D